I desire,
I am desiring,
desiring to be
someone...
to be
someone that would
make you remember
I'm also like YOU,
IMPERFECT.
I want
I am wanting
wanting to have
someone,
to be
someone that could
make me remember
I have YOU
DEPENDABLE.
I need,
I am needing,
needing to know,
If I am,
with someone,
that should
make me remember
I was loved,
loved by YOU.
I wish,
I am wishing,
wishing to give
someone...
me
something like a
second chance
that I maybe
desired,
wanted,
and needed
by
SOMEONE.
Author notes
sorry for the caps pipz...
i just need to do it...
and i'm not shouting at you...
A contest entry
- Write Now by She Stole My Voice.
300 points, ended August 21, 2008, 26 entries
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I'm not usually a huge fan of repetition, but you really made the repetition in this work Excellent work ^^
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wow!!!!! great write!!!!!!
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very nice
Your wishes and desires are common. We all wish to have these things. You wrote this very nice and so many can understand. I like this a lot, The Shaker
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This is very well penned
I hear you on this one for theres nothing wrong that we so often need reasurance a soft whisper from the one we love that all is well and we feel safe within their arms they must never leave it for later because later to say it through the pain of loss its still held within and lost to those we have always love so show love everyday for tomorrow there are no promises we will still be here to hear them
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Very Interesting! Its a good poem about you wanting,needing,and wishing to be loved by someone. Very very good poem.
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this is interesting, as Mary said.
I don't like the caps lock either,
I know you aren't yelling but it seems very very juvenile.
good luck. -
Seems like someone molested the caps lock key haha.
Anyway, this is interesting. I really don't like the caps lock;
it seems like you're yelling at the reader.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
♥
~Princess of Shadows~
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