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I met a gal...named Shallow Sal....

 

 

I met a gal named...

"Shallow Sal"

whose soul was filled

with ............

 

Her walls were tall,

conceit stood proud.

Armed guards stood

watch night and day.

 

A selective memory,

instantaneous recall.

Better watch your step

divine pleasure breeds

when you stumble, trip, or fall.

 

An old beaten gate,

hinged but one way;

Do it my way or Get Out!

A self-appointed Queen

of ultimate control.

 

Never to admit 

perhaps she was .....

Proud bullets of empty excuses

strengthen her stronghold.

Sticking it to others,

lazy labels, names, and fools

who only got what they deserved.

 

Truly unaware,

why we sometimes stare,

distance ourselves from her.

Unable to hide the murderous eyes

that guard night and day.

 
I met a gal named...

"Shallow Sal"

whose soul was filled

with ............

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

contest prompt: "shallow" left align free verse no limit let the word take you inside your skin, see what can ooze out.

I left it up to you...to decide...what dwells within her soul.


pictures talented artistry of glittergraphics.com
I was so excited when I found it...it fits the poem beautifully.


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  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Oooh wow what a bitch...
    well, at least you don't need to deal with her too often...
    do you??

    Nice access of emotion hun!
    Well written, too!


  • Slick99
    September 15, 2008

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    aBsTrAcT

    lol well done!!! i thought it was very abstract though. thanks for sharing and keep writing!!! -slick99


  • georgie
    September 14, 2008

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    lol... love this... know so many ppl like this... still there r a few good ppl left in this world... i have a few particularly good friends on here who have supported me so much since my husband went to jail and i would do anything for them in return... this tis just so true and yet funny,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Sad write here

    Often others tell the young they are worthless and stupid all their young life and they begin to believe it for they were never given the love or the chance to prove them different .No one is stupid only the teachers that holds them back


  • Dark Otter
    August 20, 2008

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    Well done!

    Shallow Hal has a new girlfriend! One that is almost as limited as he is. In my pride and arrogance I can recognize where my shallowness resides. Destroy the self ego! Its a killer.


  • moluv10
    August 8, 2008

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    clever write here sis. The title reminds me of the movie "Shallow Hal". I love how you changed up your/our thought processes with this one. best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Rheea gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    This just did not seem like you... but again hm we re women hear us er be women


  • Cannonsfire
    August 7, 2008

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    lol oh my devious mind could fill this with all sorts of things, I like the fact you have made the reader think, although I wanted to almost rhyme it like a limerick lol...nice job. Love, C


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    August 7, 2008
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    w00t!

    its awesome.

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