shallow
it's where all hope lies
so shallow
falling through the cracks
the gleam of light
so shallow
nothing more than a glimpse
so shallow you are
not even enough to grab hold of
to catch you
so shallow
the hope of holding on
your eyes
they float aimlessly
on a face so shallow
sunken with regret
a pool of dark water
so shallow
sallow skin
shallow eyes
fallen memories
lost hope of finally clutching it
what it is you grasp
you're too shallow
A contest entry
- I hope I never feel this... by Cannonsfire.
1750 points, ended August 21, 2008, 26 entries
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Let me know your feelings
Comments
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Way too many mentions of the prompt in this, it is unnecessary, for i want it to reflect the feeling and show me not tell me.
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i rlly like this, specially the last stanza, awshum
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