'Where are you going?'
I heard someone whisper one cold, night.
My heart trembled in terror, as I didn't know the answer,
'Where I am taken,' was all I could reply.
This had to be some nightmare,
and I knew that nightmare was life.
Such a sad realization..no..what an abomination
to be forced to face Reality and Strife!
Am I insane to come forth and state
that money is no more real than a fairy.
It's meant to keep you in chains, to keep you in pain,
as you struggle for the lives of your family.
Is it something you're ready to bleed for?
Will you let it take your soul?
Are you going to lay there dying or die trying,
while leaving Happiness in the freezing cold?
'Where are you going?'
I heard someone whisper one cold, night.
Then I looked to the sky and waved goodbye,
rising far, far away out of sight.
Author notes
Option: I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity. ~ Edgar Allan Poe
(Suicide Mission)
Now just one...well...cover my you know what...
Yes, the last stanza is referring to choosing death over giving up happiness and emotion and true freedom by "die trying" trying to get what's already there, so case in point...yes, it is referring to suicide. But I would like to say that this poem in no way is meant to put suicide into a good light. It's meant to be tragic and show how tragic sometimes life and always suicide can be. When it comes to the latter...no one wins, and no one gets out alive.
A contest entry
- Dark, Light, and In Between by Wandering Woodchuck.
550 points, ended August 9, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - REALLY Not For The Weak: Ultra-Deluxe Suicide-Edition by Immortal Obscurity.
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Comments
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I agree, suicide is selfish. It's always easier to leave than to be left behind, since you don't know who's going to scrape your brains from the ceiling afterward... Your mother? Your wife, or your son? Sad, really...
However, this didn't really jump out at me. The message is good, yet it could have been executed better.
Thanks for entering.
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Quite a thought provoking and interesting write which tackles a difficult subject openly and effectively. Overall well crafted and this flows well. Good luck in your contests, you should do well. Thanks for sharing. Cheers.
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Intense write. Nice job on the rhythm and rhyming. Best of luck in the contests, this one should do quite well.
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yes,suicide does not solve any problems..only adding pain to those affected by it....i like some powerful expressions which show clearly the plight we are in...well written
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Nicely done. I like this poem alot. The flow and the rhyme are great. I like the thoughts and the clarity that they were presented. Good luck!!
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