A Beautiful fleshed Moment?
The epiphany of simple skin!
It's the moment you realize,
its farther than your eyes can see.
And its closer, more intimate than your own body.
This Beautiful Fleshed Moment!
The epiphany of simply skin:
that one's own beauty can not be found
in the reflection of a mirror,
but in beloved eyes,
eyes of your beloved yourself
loved by the lives who cherish,
the only you...
Author notes
^-^ WOOT that felt damn good writing that, like a water slide !WEE!
tho now that i go back on it "This Beautiful Fleshed Moment!" feel funky?
hmm i thinks it the word " fleshed" is whats getting to me hmm
what do you think? should i get rid of that word? is there a better word i can use hmm
A contest entry
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Ah Poet
What a wonderful way to look at oneself. The simple thing like skin and how it guides us through life and protects out inners. Did cause me to take a gander at this old, but still durable piece of flesh. lol
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Beauty in the simplicity of it all, so well penned indeed just like a water slide, refreshing and new.
I like it, I like it so!
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awsome. hey this is rebecca i have a account to
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You breach the fourth dimension in your write.
can feel and see the 'fleshed' in three dimensional structure of holographic moves bonded together with passing time in its beauty.
Congrats for the lovely picture.
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Nicely Penned!
What a very descriptive piece I enjoyed reading!
Thanks for sharing, and all the best to you in the contest!
Bravo on an excellent expressed write!
Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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I love this poem. It's so completely beautiful. ^_^ I love the repetition of "the epiphany of simply skin".
"This Beautiful Fleshed Moment!
The epiphany of simply skin:
that one's own beauty can not be found
in the reflection of a mirror,
but in beloved eyes,
eyes of your beloved yourself
loved by the lives who cherish,
the only you..."
Such a powerful stanza and ending. Lovely. Thank you so much for entering.
-Lily♥ -
Wonderful
I can see what you mean with the contrast between our poems. Simple yet deep. I like that.
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OH. MY. WORD.
change nothing.
it makes perfect sense.
it is beautiful. B-E-A-UTIFUL.
i love the concept of this write. it's so... oyyy... it's beautiful.
i love this piece. ... i just love it.
thank you so much for this wonderful entry!
best wishes and best of luck! -
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wow glad you liked it
thank you ^-^
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lol, nice write! I think I like the word fleshed. I mean, it does sound better then Epidermis Moment doesn't it? lol. Thank you for entering this in my contest!
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yeah i think it does sound better then epidermis lol
thanks
-kas K bubbles
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i love it
puuuuuuuuuurrrfection
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