When beneath the sensual veil of a humid summer's morn'
I invited myself down to the haze of the trees
And dark green leaves,
Languid
And swaying in the summer breeze
When on an evening's knock
I open the door to a calm and sultry air
Sequined by stars,
Promising eternity
How can I not release my soul to nature's mistress
Pregnant though she is with fragrant lilies
Blushing in the morning from last evening's infidelity,
Of bringing life to the streams
That had been frozen by winter's solitude
Author notes
Picture courtesy of cyzeal@www.deviantart.com
A contest entry
- Summer Suspended by Gypsie Ink.
300 points, ended August 9, 2008, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice write . . liked "the sensual veil" and "nature's mistress" . . congrats on the silver
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It wonderful full of meaning and great images that inspired by your words. The picture and words are an inspiration to me to work a little harder. Right now my dogs are feeling unloved. I had more work then free time.I lost my phone and your number it not in my new one and can not find it any where. I think I have lost my mind my brother died last Sunday it been a week. I am feeling old I know more people gone then alive. That why I love this poem it reminds us to love the time we have with hope.
love your sis
Brenda
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YA know, when I saw this image, I thought of you! Congratulations on the most well deserved silver trophy! There is so much imagery in this write. Your metaphors are the best, yet. "Blushing in the morning from last evening's infidelity" what a powerful line. I can tell you worked a long while to get this one just right! I am not such a perfectionist! I write the words as they come, check the spelling and punctuation. That's it. YOu, on the other hand have not only mastered the art of well-rhymed poetry, but are getting better with metaphors and imagery. Sometimes aging can be a good thing! LOL
Love and hugs,
sis xoxo
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Wow. Fantasy and nature combined. Well done. No wonder you won the silver. Very impressive piece, my friend.
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very sensual
Your words describe this triste with nature very sensually.
Congrats on the Silver! It was well deserved.
Jeannette
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Exquisite!
Beautiful and ripe. A magickal and captivating write! Soft and warm. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in my contest. -
Magnificent!!
Oh My Love the picture and how You compliment
Sequined by stars
also
haze of trees
grab hard-
Excellent take on the prompt Sis
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Beautiful detailed and stirring images; I can breathe the air and feel these scenes in my mind's eye.
Lovely!
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stirring
I haven't read the contest parameters, and maybe I should to put it all into context. That being said, the two "when"s seemed to be setting a format theme, then not...., also, The first stanza was set up with a strong setting imagery "invited myself down to the trees"....I was hoping it would develop further in the second stanza. I'm a bit lost in the nature's mistress, and celestral innuendo and what part your release would play in that threesome? I enjoyed your metaphors out of context of the 'infidelity theme'; this was beautiful:
"bringing life to the streams That had been frozen by winter's solitude ". The thought behind that line, and nature's persistance of change and evolution, the sometimes quiet emotions of her eternal presence and seasons, do create desire and stirrings within, when we look...and listen to pulsations all around us... lovely work Blushfulmoon -darmok
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What a trip!
Loved reading this two times through and appreciating what you did to write this beauty of a poem.
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thank you all so much
Thanks so much for the positive comments on this poem
It was quiet a bit different with me with all the different metaphors....
Again thank you
Your comments mean so much
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Bravo!
Very nicely done, Sis! Our Nature Girl has outdone herself again! Summer's my favorite season and I love the imagery you've used in this poem!
Best of Luck in this contest!
Love Ya!
♥ Maureen
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the contentment in this piece,almost leads me to a place i wanna be, excellent fit for this contest, good luck...my sweet sis
Lin
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Oh my! You've outdone yourself, girl! Nature sings in the heart of this one with such a penchant for life and bloom. I feel summer lilt with expectation in the currents of last stanza. "Blushing in the morning from last evening's infidelity" Super personification and metaphor. Bravo! ~ Karen
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Such a beautiful poem. I enjoyed this alot. The imagery is wonderful. Best of luck my friend.
Linda
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Excellent
Oh my sis, such a fantastic creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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