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This Feeling...

It's only been a couple years
But it isn't really easy.
They come and go, those tears,
And yet he still makes me queasy...

 

It isn't an uncomfortable feeling.

In fact, I wish it would be here forever!

Every night I end up kneeling

Praying that he won't just say 'Whatever!'

 

This guy is my life

And I couldn't live without him.

I wish that I could be his wife

But that thought is just a whim.

 

Sometimes I know that things can't be

But other times I just wish it would come true.

Like how I wish that he would just kiss me

Or at least give me some kind of clue!

 

It would have to be a clue that's quite easy

Because I am not all that smart.

Yet it can't be anything cheesy.

I hope it'd be something I could feel in my heart.

 

This guy is my everything

But right now I feel dead inside.

My heart can't stop this feeling

Nor can it stop the pride.

 

I am proud to love him

But doing so is killing me.

My tears are filled to the rim

And he treats me like a banshee!

 

This empty feeling inside of me

Won't stay away from my heart.

He stabbed me instead of choosing to agree

And so because of this we have to be apart.

 

Author notes

Well, I'm just starting to rhyme so it isn't very good, and like most of my other rhyming poems, it sounds kind of forced... so this probably won't win anything but I thought i'd try... It's for Daniel... We broke up a while ago for extremely good reason but i still love him and I can't let go. Depression has come and gone, but now it's an empty feeling. I hope it isn't too off topic at the beginning but I can get a bit carried away sometimes. hope you like it! Thanks!

~Koko~

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  • XxSuicidal-LovexX
    August 9, 2008
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    Not bad for a beginner rhymer. I cant rhyme hardly at all, so this is pretty good. I can feel the heartache pouring out of this poem. It sucks when you break up, but still love the person =[. I hope this passes soon, and you chipper up a bit =}. Thanks so much for entering


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    August 9, 2008
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    hell i'm not a rhymer myself so i'm not gonna look at that side of it but i definitely got the emotions you are feeling. and i can so relate to that empty feeling youre left with after the worst part is over.

    i hope that emptiness gets filled for you hun


  • HereComesTheSun
    August 8, 2008

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    the rhyming is a bit cheesy and forced but the emotion in the poem is so great it makes up for any negitve great job