I fell for your everlasting,
drowning in your vision.
Speechless I became, living in your lie.
Author notes
AP Name: Lowercase Prelude
Amaranthine Lover
A contest entry
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Comments
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Creates quite an impact on the emotions what you have scribed with your pen. Powerful! I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "To Be Put On My Favorites List."
Ted E
PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!
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ugh everlasting love usually ends in a lie with me *LoLz* great job, love the concept.
♥ Kathraina -
wrenching!
very touching,but...too many syllables!
please send another but on a theme rooted in the natural world!
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This is powerful. I like the use of the white writing on the blue background that conjures up the sense of drowning, or at least it did for me. Definitely a bad realtionship being described here. But you have a real way with words- this was a great poem. Short and powerful. Thank you for entering my contest and letting me read it.
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An interesting piece brother!
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To all contestants already entered, please put author's name and Amaranthine Lover in the author's notes so that I know who you are and that I know you read my rules, thank you!
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Ahhhhhhhhhhh a tough one to feel. well done in this write.
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WOW!This is deep man...Or girl...(Sorry) Great write!
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I fell for your everlasting,
drowning in your vision.
Speechless I became, living in your lie.
Very emotional hiaku, and the ending is one you think about. Thank you so much.
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Well penned.
Mylee
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this is an amazing haiku. i love how a person an fit so much detail into them with such vivid and captivating words. another wonderful write, well done
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Everlasting what?
Intriguing poem. I just wish it had more explanation. So vague.
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