We waited,
wanting
longing
to be.
But when locked
you turned,
away.
Author notes
prompt fear
12words
i fear that i love him too much, and its all a dream, and when reality comes....we'll both be heart broken....
A contest entry
- Quickie ~ come one come 12 by Unsigned.
300 points, ended August 7, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So few words but so much we can read into them...the heart goes on despite its bleeding until it meets a match to be settled with for ever more.
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I like the title a lot, and I feel it works well with the poem. Will your love stay strong, be vigilant against abrasive reality, or will it disintegrate into ash...a very sad poem Steph. Congrats on the goldie
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~Meg
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Nice
The best 12 word poem ever...siriously
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hahahaha, thanks
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Wow what an excellent piece! Very sad but your words are most powerful.
Congratulations on your well deserved trophy
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a good short piece of poetry, hard edged and full of sighs i feel - love, we fear it more than anything else i reckon.
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Well done! A lot said in just a few words!
Congrats. on the Gold!!
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"Heartbreak comes to all, it is the trying of our soul, the testing of spirit, the emptiness, which makes us whole."
I'm always intrigued by your heart's labors Steph and congrats on the gold!
With much love,
mj.
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lol what?
*hugs*
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Back again to say congrats on the gold...
Joann -
short sweet an perfectly displayed emotion of the tricks that play within our minds. You have noothing to lose by choosing to have faith over impending doom, my sweet stephiez. So whhy not have faith until time comes calling to rewrd that faith or your faith was proven unfounded?'s
love,
Dad
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But when locked you turned, away.a great take on the promt good luck in the contest
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Beautifully penned, full of deep emotion ~ best of luck in the contest hun
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That is a horror waiting to happen, cheer up, it'll all work out, loved your write.
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you mean its going to happen? 0.o
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My dear small one...you know I care for you as one of my own and you amaze me with your skill and wording. 12 perfect words writen from the heart...
Thank you...
Dad
XXX
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wow
seriously wow thats all i can say wow
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Well done, Stephanie... a dark write about life's light... Bravo!
Ken
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Fear of loving to much,
dear you are not alone there
for there are many that share
this same fear, but not admit it.
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Well this is a good take on the prompt sweety goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love always
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