'The moment she entered the room, everyone fell silent. All eyes were fixed on her. Everyone grimaced and snickered. They all left the room immediately, leaving her in the room all alone again. She walked into another room, and once again the same thing happened. She has been noticing a small black figure out of the corner of her eye each time the crowd left, and this time she turned to look at it.'
Try as she might there was nothing there to see. If only she had looked in the mirror at that instant in time she might have seen a misshapen figure with little black wings attached to its back. It moved like mist trailing above the floor. Neither man nor woman could it be determine but it seem to move in and out of space and time; there and not there at the same time if this is possible.
What she didn’t realize was that the people where running away in fear of the unknown shadow that accompanied her everywhere she went. The shadow consisted of an entity that was “Pure Evil”. Invisible to the naked eye but it emitted a fragrance of tremendous dread. A sense of overpowering panic would overcome the senses and the desire to be elsewhere could not be contained.
She thought to herself; what’s going on I don’t understand, do I smell, is my slip showing. What! Forget it and the hell with all of them. She lowered her head with much despair and decided she might as well go home. As she was leaving the building suddenly agonizing pain exploded in her head……………………………..
Author notes
'Stickers and Ponies and Myspace dot com!!'
A contest entry
- What Comes Next? by XxXEmoRainDropsXxX.
775 points, ended August 22, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The one which won silver in this had terrible spelling mistakes, and there you were with this lovely write. I think something went amiss somehow. this was excellent. the story, the suspense, and neither gold nor silver compares with this. What has gone wrong in this world. I would say this should have god silver at the very least. I love this little gem, "Invisible to the naked eye but it emitted a fragrance of tremendous dread. A sense of overpowering panic..," best wishes, Sir Titus
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You touch me deeply with your comments and I thank you. I've found that often friends give trophys to friends but thats okay because more than anything I enjoy writing. God Blee, Jo-Ann
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and to add more, i really love the end!!
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LOL Thank you, Thank You, and Thank You for the HM. God Bless,
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wow!! very good!! thank you so much for entering and good luck!! i especially like this because its more of the theme i was going for. i love!! good job!
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Thank you for the opportunity to be a part of this its a great idea.
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