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ptolema

Missing image

deepening eyes dream through glass,
catch sight of future kaleidoscopes

speaking from the milky way's distance,

looking for a meanwhile


I gaze into rapture
flying in from the moon
as mockingbird serenades
guide me into something more

I am not stationary,
no one knows who I am,
are you paying attention?

a ponytail of what will be
wanders into far blue,
bringing it up close, sacred

my tapping fingers doze off
into abracadabra dreams of magic wands
and no one dying off the radar

the feeling in my hip joint rotation murmurs in the stillness
and mental telepathy looks for an opening
in the shared space of repression and projection
 
There is no one center, ptolemy


I move, sway with the motion,
the day and night curve of the earth,
and spots travel across my suns
as the phases of venus, moons of jupiter

planetary positions migrate
as guiding landmarks

through the future’s perspective
and past’s proof of evidence

inklings

by way of a managed muse
let me know that I am not lost

Author notes

Picture Prompt => Artist credit => http://m0thyyku.deviantart.com/art/sea-in-view-94097263

Deep nods to Ptolemy, Copernicus and Galileo and perspective.
Homage to all our centers and the blessings they bring.

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  • notorious
    August 21, 2008
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    Congrats


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 18, 2008

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    This has such a feeling of searching for a way to be centered and to touch serenity! Excellent write!

  • notorious
    August 14, 2008

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    Love!

    The title ROCKS.

    "deepening eyes dream through glass,
    catch sight of future kaleidoscopes
    speaking from the milky way's distance,
    looking for a meanwhile"
    Ah...makes me think of a girl who needs something to write (e.g. Sailor Ptolema...hehehe)
    "looking for a meanwhile" is FABULOUS!!!

    "as mockingbird serenades"
    Did you psychically know that I love the word 'mockingbird'? You should use it more often.

    "I am not stationary,
    no one knows who I am,
    are you paying attention?"
    Ooh, this makes me think of The Prestige (have you see it?) where this mantra is repeated quite a few times: "Are you watching closely?"
    Ah...anything that brings to mind The Prestige is good in my books.

    "a ponytail of what will be"
    Clever, since the girl in question does have a ponytail.

    "my tapping fingers doze off"
    Could refer to you typing.

    "into abracadabra dreams of magic wands
    and no one dying off the radar"
    'abracadabra'...that is wicked cool...hehe, wands again?

    "and mental telepathy looks for an opening
    in the shared space of repression and projection"
    LOVE.

    Have you always lowercased everything in your poems? I don't think so...
    Or I'm dreadfully unobservant.

    That last stanza...LoL

    Good luck


  • sailor ptolema
    August 13, 2008

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    " manipulated mentality" >>>I thought the alliteration, combined with its 9 syllables was too heavy, at least for me .

    Other than than that, I can't really find anything I didn't like.


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    There is no one center, ptolemy">>I just adored the simpleness of this line .

    Obviously, I love the title . I love that this has a gentle rock to it. It flows nicely with the shifting perspective of the poem.

    Thanks for entering and g'luck.

    -sailor ptolema

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  • notorious
    August 8, 2008
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    How does Meghan always get to you first?
    Can I just give you a picture to write about not for this contest?

    Let me know...LoL, I know it's a silly request


  • sailor ptolema
    August 7, 2008
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