Like a silent assassin the cold creeps
It crawls and curls its way towards me
Stalking my every move
Spreading its wings around me
The bitter air dances on my lips
Teasing me, daring me to let it in
I gasp and the painter goes to work
Streaking ice blue down my throat
I try to look for refuge
To find a place where it cannot engulf me more
But my eyes are frozen
Stuck starring at the last thing I chose to see
Paralysed
I try with my last warmth to fight back
But I’m bound by it
Held in place by the Ice Queen’s army
And then, could it be?
My saviour
My Knight in the brightest shining armour
The Sun
Author notes
I struggled with this as I never write free verse so any comments would be great!
I also struggled with the title so please suggest something if you feel it's wrong!
Anyway, this is just how I felt that she feels... hope t's what you were looking for!!
Diamond Butterfly x
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The bitter air dances on my lips
Teasing me, daring me to let it in
I gasp and the painter goes to work
Streaking ice blue down my throat
This is a great stanza. Your images really jump of the page. I enjoyed reading the whole piece and have looked to find something I'd change, but couldn't.
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Thanks you.. I enjoyed writting it.
db x
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Oh! I really liked this.. It's unqiue and yet it has this fantasy thing going on..Lol. I like that! the imagery was really vivid too.. You really did such a wonderful job with the prompt.. Thank you very much for sharing.. I wish you the best of luck..
Angel
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Brilliant, I loved the fantasy allegory, very clever as I was carried to a place in my mind where I imagined this whole scenario played out. Well done dear!
All the best,
mj.
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A very unique and creative interpretation... I love the feeling of this... the last vestiges of life being sucked out and the hopt.... Best of luck...
Ken
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That's just beautiful! A completely different take. A wonderful write. Very imaginative.
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