Even though I hide behind this mask
Doesn't mean I don't dream
Of running happily through
Those same fields as you
Even though I may close my eyes
To things that frighten me
Doesn't mean I run and hide
As some might do
Even though I may not speak
A lot of words out loud
Doesn't mean I haven't got anything to say
I just choose to only say important things
And even though I may seem lost sometimes
And a lot is running through my mind
Doesn't mean I'm crazy
I've just got a lot to work on
Author notes
pic credit: Ceres by ~Mischx
A contest entry
- Individualized pics #4 by notorious.
2239 points, ended August 19, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be kinder than necessary, for everyone you meet is fighting some kind of battle!
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A wonderful poem, that touched me. Congratulations on a wonderful write. I am delighted that you expressed yourself so well and did not allow your feelings, your soul to be edited by poetic snobbery.
Very well done. I look forward to reading more of your poetry.
Be well,
Slayer
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thank you sooo much for understanding and for commenting... sorry ive been away i was hospitalize for an OD.... but im home now...
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Hang in there you!
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You and me sis.. We have a lot of things to work on and we'll work on them together eh?
you help me I'll help you and in the end we'll laugh at all the stupid things we did or do! and that so rhymed lol you exposed a lot of yourself in this write sis and you did a wonderful job.. I loved it 
Angel
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thank you sooo much for this comment it means alot hugs sissy..... hugs....
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I totally disagree with the previous comment about this not beling 'eloquent'. Knowing this author this does speaks volumes and much personal thought was put into the write. It shows a lot of self reflection leading to self knowing and then onto realization of self worth and beginning to work on what needs to be accomplished and say, yet still struggling to do so. I enjoyed this write and yes it is very self empowering,especially if one has never done that for one's self before. Good luck.
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I really liked the picture you got!!! I need to high-five Meghan for choosing this pic.
"Be kinder than necessary"
LoL...one of the rules was to be open to constructive criticism.
There was nothing here that was particularly poignant for me...
And I actually got a feeling of a song here, as opposed to a poem because of the simplistic style & repetition of 'Even'.
This does seem to be surprisingly self-empowering...which is good, but I think there are more...eloquent ways to make your point. I didn't get the feeling that you challenged yourself when you wrote this.
"I've just got a lot to work on"
To me, this line made me wonder whether this also a dual meaning...like, you weren't just referring to life but the poem itself.
Or maybe..it wasn't a dual meaning. I dunno.
Good luck
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thank you for your comment and yes i knew the rules but it says that on all my poems as its my fav quote... anyway thanks for the commment but you can DQ if you like this piece is very important to me.. the way it is sorry.. if it didnt mean so much i would change it.. like you suggest... i do understand what you mean just for me it says all it needs to say about me... thanks though...
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I like this. It is a powerful strong poem of confidence. I look forward to more of them. . Awesome job.
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I am waiting ....
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KICK-ASS pic
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