I’m standing at the edge
Waiting for the final hit
Your selfish words be the cause
Even if you deny it
I’m standing at the edge
Knowing it’s almost over for me
Realizing I could have changed
What now is my destiny
I’m standing at the edge
With tears streaming down my face
Knowing without a doubt
It’s my fault I’m at this place
I’m standing at the edge
Waiting for the final hit
And it’s finally happened
You are the cause of it…
By: SLD January 8, 2004
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I'm not sure really what to say... take it how you wish.
Written January 8th, 2004
What did you think
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not sure
I like the rythim, I can tell you have or are hurt, I can certainly relate
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This poem is sad, and I hope you don't feel the same now.
Love can turn bad and without warnings, make us feel like losing everything. Fighting the sadness is the only way to get cured.
Again, a very good poem of yours!
Mari
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Thank You For Your Kind Words, Your Poems Speak So Much
Realism, Your Creative & Honest In Your Work, I Truly Read 4 Already, One Made Me Cry. Your Skilled & Very Articulate
I Wish They Were Complied Into A Book
Serene & Collectable
Your Very Gifted
Much Luck
Your Forte Is Definatley Poetry
Thank You For Sharing
God Bless
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Just wanted to say it's Sonya not Sundra!
HEHE *sonya*
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Sonya,
Bad always tend to follow us when we are "inactive" in
the direction of our life. Every second is another opportunity
to change where and who we are if we aren't happy in our present
situation. We never have to stand idly by and just wait for
the worse to happen, that comes often enough on it's own.
Better that we choose the course we will take our boat of
life, even if the storms of life blow us off course, we can
always "adjust" our rudder (thinking) to get back to where
we should be heading...
Hugs...Eddy
COURSE SET
You might be the boat
but the rudder I be
And my destination
is what I will see
You can only hold me
but the course I do set
So don't try to contain me
cause my needs will be met
-Eddy-
1/14/04
Edited on Jan 15, 5:58 p.m. because 'I always wanted to be an editor ::grins::'. -
This is really good...I liked it alot....I like the style you wrote this poem....very nice.....keep writing....Dez
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This is just like all ur other poems, amazing. I love reading ur work, always write with ur heart. Luves Me
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Truthfully intense
You are a beautiful lady and very strong. Whatever happens in life, you will handle it and if you need someone to talk to, I'm here for you. An intense poem with a lot of heart. Tim -
Amazing! You are awesome woman! Keep on writing but stay away form the edge of the cliff. If not, I'll put a trampoline down there so you can bounce back up. But in all seriousness... This poem was deep, full of emotion and the imagery is amazing.
Love ya,
Jewels -
brilliant, made me think of someone on the edge of a cliff top, thinking about their problems, liked the repetition, great write
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This is a really great poem. Definately very deep and it flowed very well. Hope everythings ok though
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Wow gurl...this was great! I'm not really sure how to take it, or what your reasonings were that you wrote it for. Butya know I'm here for ya! Great write!
Love Always,
~*Jenn
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this is crazy...i really like it...i saw this picture with this chick standing on the edge of a cliff and her dress was swaying in the wind....this poem makes me think alot about it...if i happen to come across it again, ill have to send it to ya...awesome write!!
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I love it... it seems more like a suicidal write to me, like your on the edge of ending it, and they're the cause, is that the way you were going? Lol... great flow, you flow like a pro! (sorry so cheesey) Thanks for all the wonderful comments sonya.. I really appreciate you taking the time and energy into reading some of my crappy poems, makes me feel like maybe im not such a bad poet after all. Great write and thanks for sharing!
Much Love
~Laura
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i don't believe in destiny really i just don't think there is one and you probably couldn't have changed it becuase that's the way it was supposed to be...that's life as much as you might want to jump off the edge...that's just how it is. This poem was soo deep i really liked it and how you worded it very nicely you have some talent and it's just a really good poem.
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