A touch upon a tear stained face,
a reassuring hug,
a word that urges you to act,
and eyes that show such love
a mothers love,
so different,
from anything on earth,
right at the point that you give up,
she gives to hope re-birth.
and though you may not see a way,
through all the dark and gloom,
her eyes see much further yet,
and she knows just what to do.
we all need a mother,
to guide us through each day,
she knows that she's not perfect,
but she's growing every day.
and when she sees that moment,
when we stumble or we fall,
she'll be there with her arms held wide,
with love that covers all
Author notes
for the contest i chose option one. this poem is about a mothers love.
A contest entry
- For the Mothers, and Mothers-To-Be. by Crash Mayhem.
600 points, ended September 2, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOTS OF OPTIONS! by Shenanigans.
700 points, ended November 23, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I LOVE the sentiment in this poem--so beautiful! The only thing I would suggest is that you re-examine your rhyming/meter in the last 3 stanzas---some of the rhymes are a little too much of a stretch (gloom...do) and the repeated day/day (stanza 4) interrupt the flow. All the same excellent work, this really is a beautiful piece. Best of luck in the contest! --Shannon
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Aww, this is very sweet.
And the timing and the rhyming [[wow I haven't spelled that word in forever I hope I spelled it right. lol]]
But the timing n such is great.
I absolutely love it!
Good luck! I'm deffinately gunna keep this one in mind!
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