talented mastermind
speculates my glimpse
of floweret in hand
intellect encounters prowess
eyes avert
silent stalking
pale bloom
blurred with blanched
fingers
machination
against human
cerebral thinker
you wan against
alley understanding
my little prey...
Author notes
Prompt:
http://troglodytic.deviantart.com/art/Intrigue-62081916
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A contest entry
- Individualized pics #4 by notorious.
2239 points, ended August 19, 2008, 23 entries
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ummmm....meow?
hmmm...looks a bit like an Abysinian...a lotus blossom eater I assume? ;-) Doesn't matter much as long as he doesn't eat the invisible mice scurrying through the halls here.
You obviously know cats well!
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It's just the way you've arranged it... You could work on that part... The visual side of it... And there is too many hard words colliding if you understand;-)
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This doesn't work....
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Max?
What do you mean does it need fixed? It was a challenge to make such a pretty picture alittle sinster.
Always up for advise whether i take it or not lol
~Lisa~
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I like this
You did well with the pic when you thought you wouldn't--yeah!!
"talented mastermind"
One of the few things I thought was off about the poem was 'talented'. I think "mastermind" kind of implies a lot of genius & talent. It feels like an unnecessary adjective here. "mastermind" alone is more snappy.
"speculates my glimpse/of floweret in hand"
Great description of the pic...and 'floweret' could represent a reward or something else...
"intellect encounters prowess"
I love that.
"silent stalking"
LoL!!!
"pale bloom/blurred with blanched/fingers"
Nice.
"machination/against human"
A reference to The Matrix?
That was no accident, was it? LoL
"cerebral thinker"
Hmm...'cerebral thinker' seems a bit redundant...Replace it with something else??
"alley understanding"
Good one!! I can see the rough beginnings for the kitty here. 
"my little prey..."==>"my little prey ..."
Most people disregard me saying this...
but the ellipsis (in poetry and sometimes prose when it's published) is meant to be used with a space PRECEDING it...
Good luck & tell me if you make edits -
Is the alternative pic better?
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Best of luck
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lol why the hehe? hmmm think i can't pull this off. lol
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"hehe" because it's cute.
LoL...you have until August 21st. If you think you can't do it, then it means you should try.
But here's an alternative pic:
http://metiu.deviantart.com/art/dancers-in-the-dark-44613430
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