CLEAR! Bzzzzzzzz.....
Still nothing.
CLEAR! Bzzzzzzzz.....
Come on damnit!
Brian, it's over. Call it. Time of death, 18:42.
Afterlife.
Truth be known, I'd hoped for a heaven.
A nirvana of peace, and calm.
A place of warmth and happiness.
Of love and affection.
But if I were true to myself
And this afterlife were just
I may find myself in heat
In sulphur and brimstone
But, I don't.
I find myself in neither a calm peace
Nor a torturous burning hell
Just a wakeful blackness. Of sensory deprivation.
I hear voices. I hear words.
"Brian. It's over. Call it. Time of death, 18:42."
My brain, my life, it's fading. I call your name.
....
Than nothing.
Author notes
Competition rules changes, so I dropped the last one I had in out, and wrote this new one.
As an atheist, the only thing I truly find myself envious for religious people over is an afterlife. As much as I wish there were an afterlife, I just don't believe in it. So for atheists, we have to come to terms with death as an eternal. Many say this is a bleak way of looking at things, but I disagree. By facing a mortality of such levels, it serves to focus your life and head. When I die, I know the last thought through my mind will be of my loved one(s).
A contest entry
- Make fun of the afterlife by michael thomas.
450 points, ended August 9, 2008, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"Afterlife", the first and gold trophy would have won any contest for the funny mock words that make it a joy to read. The writer is playing with the concept and nothing could be more enjoyable than this type of joy. It is a true honor to have ea write her delightful words. I thank her.
The two other admissions were not funny but the writer tried his best to answer the prompt in his fashion. I love making jokes of serious concepts because I have learned that in our world nothing is as it seems, therefore taking anything too seriously makes us a bit lopsided. I truly thank this writer for submitting to the first prompt and then to the second prompt that I used to make the contest a little easier to write towards. I allowed both admissions because of this change. His poems are well worth the read and I am honored.
Both of you, thank you. I know that despite the small response, your words are seen by many eyes and hearts that we never imagine.
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I truly apologize for changing the contest. I finally decided to make it a "Make Fun" contest. That seems to be the type of contest that I am going to center on in the future. Your poem is well done and fits in with the new contest. Your author notes are fine and I am sorry for causing you trouble. thank you for going out of your way to make a nice entry for my contest.
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