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Today is Tomorrow

O  V  E  R
the river

and

the trees
U N D E R

in Earth
        Mothers
    /\
  / o \
House we live
|_|-|_|

ACRtranquilityOSS
animals=^.^=play
canvases [[capture]]
the BREA  of day
              K

THR blue OU sky GH

and

      R      O     
A  the world  U
      D      N

♥♥♥s cryOUT U N F U R L E D

then
                                          e    c    h    o    s
silence E  C  H  O  S    s    s
                          e    c    h    o    s

          G  VOICES          Hope
        N                C A  R  R  Y 
        I
      T
    F
  I
L
      ___
    ___      ___
___      O    ____
SUN SETTLES

NIGHT F
            A
                L
                  L                                  w    e
                    S across the landscape s  i  l  d
                                                          r
*D*R*E*A*M*S* un F O L D
          ___
    ___      ___
___      O    ____
    SUN RISES

sleepy o.o eyes
        E m B r A c E
                the (birth) of a new day

Author notes

"Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive"
this is not my prettiest DP but i hope you like it (._.)
its a dirty pretty world
Option # 1: best Dirty pretty writes

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Kitsune Kyuuketsuki
    August 21, 2008
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    That was the very best dirty pretty I have ever read.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 19, 2008

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    I love how you wrote this so uniquely & creatively. It was definitely a fun poem to read, & it reminded me of that one song...can't place the title right now, haha, but you wrote this brilliantly. Though, I felt there was just a little too much punctuation, it was all the same as amazing as ever. =)

    -THR blue OU sky GH

    and

    R O
    A the world U
    D N

    I think that was my favorite part. I love how you wrote that. Very creative format. Keep writing & good luck in the contest ! Thanks for entering ♥


  • HugsForEveryone
    August 18, 2008

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    This is a really great poem. It was really cool how you arranged the words in different places. It was a fun read, but sometimes I got confused as to what you were saying. For example:

    ......................w.....e
    across the landscape s i l d
    ......................... r
    (Sorry I had to put the dots)
    What was that supposed to mean?
    Anyway, this was great and a funny thing to think about.
    Nice job.
    ~Pandy


    • Darkwell
      August 18, 2008
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      it's
      "night falls across the landscape swirled"

      and thanxu for the comment


  • perfectsunset gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Oh this was a very wonderful dirty pretty write.
    The words were just really scattered and I found it hard to read .. kind of takes away from the meaning.
    Dirty pretty doesn't need all of that punctuation,
    it looks better with just maybe a little bit.
    But that's just my opinion.

    Other than that this was a good write

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Florida Sunshine
    August 8, 2008

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    I don't even know where to begin... ~ Wow~ ... This was simply a fun read from start to finish. I am the type of person who enjoys figuring out puzzles pieces -- so to speak.

    O V E R
    the river
    Over the river
    the trees
    U N D E R

    in Earth
    and under the trees in earth

    It is refreshing ~ to see the work that one puts into this. ~ it just makes for fun read.

    Thanks for entering the contest ~ it was a welcome pleasure to read and review your work, you did a terrific job!

    Best of luck to you,
    Florida Sunshine


    • Darkwell
      August 8, 2008
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      im so happy you liked it i wrote it special for you

  • midnightblue1272
    August 7, 2008

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    Wow!

    This truly is unlike any other poem I've ever seen. A lot of hope put into this one. Fine job, young poet.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Lizzy Beth, you continue to amaze. This is a well thought out poem, presenting a cohesive theme with complex content. It is much enhanced by the "dirty pretty" style. While much of the poetry in this style is silly, juvenile, unimaginative and uninteresting, you have incorporated the style with the content amazingly well. This poem's visual imagery is delightful and as intellectually compelling as any strictly verbal configuration of speech.


  • Luckintheshadows
    August 7, 2008

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    *jaw drops* oh my goodness!!! This is superb, wow, I'm currently speechless....I absolutely adore the imagery you've painted, the layout is so absolutely inspiring!!Well done! luck to you in the contest, and much thanks for sharing this creation,

    Luck.

  • aaaaaaaa
    August 7, 2008

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    you know I don't like dirty pretty. I see what you were talking about now well it's creative, I'll give ya that. I like the house one and the 'around the world' part. good luck in the contest.

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