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Love Trusts Anew (Collab: poeticweaver)

Within my life I let you in
I was an open door.
All the love that I had given
you wanted something more.

I’ve given to you all I am
and wish to remain the us as we.
Like the lion and the lamb
my Heaven is you beside me.

Come here I will give you all,
all that I can give.
Then you can make the call
if this is the life to live.

I know your fragrance like a rose
my darling you’ll always be.
My love for you forever grows
from now till eternity.

I left the door wide open for you
so you can let yourself in.
If there's a need to say we're through
please, close the door when you're leaving.

Know within my soul I fly
each time I feel you near.
Baby my heart cannot lie
so let go of all the fear.

Open or shut is determined,
by the decisions you make.
It shall remain ajar, if you return,
and realize you made a mistake.

What ever I’ve done wrong to you
it will never happen again.
For you remain my love true blue
and our future is on the mend.

And I hope you remain true
for life within me isn't the same.
Heart and soul I’ve called you
you’ve heard the whispers of your name.

Dusk till dawn brought restlessness
but now we’re entwined as one.
I’m not complete I must confess
a day without you death has won.

Though I peak watching for your shadow
when nightmares still return.
As I awake with your sweet soul
my wanting spirit no longer yearn.

For there’s no other in this world
that heals my wounds as you do.
Our lives our precious as love unfurls
and I’m so in love with you.

So as we dance and sing in love
let us live this lifetime long.
And thank the precious Lord above
for giving us a faith so strong.

As grace guides us through new songs.
Loving one another in sweet harmony.

Author notes

A contest entry for:
Door _ A Collaboration Contest sponsored by ArtFully Me and Cat
Collaborative poetry between two AP poets. Prompt: door

Once again, Thanks Timothy for touching me with your light.This was simply a pleasure working with you.

Love you hon.

He is a must read: http://allpoetry.com/poeticweaver

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Comments

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  • The Drifter
    September 4, 2008

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    Thank you for this poem gor it speaks the words of my heart to My Lady--I just wish she would read this poem.
    It is so wonderful--thank you again


  • Cat gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    i remember being disappointed that you posted so quickly with such a long poem- I tried to encourage you to take your time- i think given
    more time and some adjustments you could have gotten past
    some of the easy cliche'd images and
    delved into something longer lasting and deeper-

    i think you cut yourselves short -
    although as liza said your rhyme scheme held fairly well - your images were so cliche'd that it detracted from the positives-

    on the positive side- i do believe you really enjoyed yourselves writing this- and that counts for a lot.

    thanks so much,
    mary


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    If there's a need to say we're through
    please, close the door when your leaving.

    the 'your' here should be 'you're'

    The rhyme scheme holds together well, and the meter stays fairly regular throughout. An accomplishment in any write.

    It's also impossible for me to distinguish whose voice is whose in this, though to be fair I'm not familiar with either, and were I that might be different.

    That said, I find it a bit disjointed, meaning it seems like a mix of an argument as well as a statement of bonding. Nice collaboration, but a bit too cliché and poetic with its grammar for my personal taste.

    Thank you for entering.


  • Griswold gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    Nicely done you two, another wonderfully penned piece here. Great take on the prompt. Best of luck...Scott Love you Tory.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Lots of Love.

    Thanks for sharing your ink with me, not sure it's our best, but as you said, one to be treasured indeed! It sure looks like many enjoyed it at-least, as we. So that's always a plus! Much love and light sweet soul! Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 7, 2008
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    stunningly beautiful

    I see that gold trophy on it's way to the two of you.


  • Rele anmwe
    August 7, 2008

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    It sounds like an engagement, I like it, although I think it doesn't have much depth do it. It sounds like some of the poems that I write, okay, but not top notch. I do no poetic weaver has mad flow and his works are often elegant, from the works I've read by him/her, I think this is not one of his best. But I like it, thank you for sharing, have a great day


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      August 7, 2008
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      Well we are indeed allowed our own opinion and as you may find this not one of HIS best YOU have read I found it to be the most precious piece we have written. WHo needs "depth" when there's love and passion..Sometimes, you have to go where the heart goes and not what the audience wants. This time we rode it out and to me, achieved a more memorable treasure then a trophy.

      Thanks for reading us and we do appreciate your comment. Maybe the next one will fulfill your wishes from his heart and soul, this one satisfied mine.

      s

      Love

      Passionspromise


  • MissyMouse
    August 7, 2008

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    "I know your fragrance like a rose
    my darling you’ll always be.
    My love for you forever grows
    from now till eternity."

    A beautiful expression of love. I'm touched by this poem. Thank you.

    ~Amy


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Another fantastic collab between you two, you push each other to greater heights each time.

    Wonderful poetry, both of you!


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    i almost felt like swooning...this is the love that I know...
    with open arms...and with open arms too if the love would want to let go

    very unselfish...

    Anna Lee


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    TWo master poets co-lab....

    absolutely beautiful and frame worthy of placing in our
    homes!
    Applause-Applause-Applause!
    ears/Seattle


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    Wonderfully Written!

    WOW! This is so gorgeous and wonderfully
    thought out. There is so much passion and
    sincerity throughout this poem. I love the
    openness and chemistry between the two of you!
    I am sure that you both will do well in this
    contest! This is a true winner in my book!
    All the best to you my friends and keep up
    the wonderful work here!




    Jeremy0826


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 6, 2008

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    Awww -- perfectly penned again. You two are on a roll! This flows nicely and the penmanship between you two reflects the kindred spirits you both store within.

    Beautifully written -- Pat on both of your backs for this one!

    Your friend,
    She-ra

    • PassionsPromise gold member
      August 6, 2008

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      Thanks sweetheart
      Appreciate your kind words. Timothy rocks. As always he knows how to kick me in the behind and get 'er done.
      Now about my flat tire miss thang LOL
      again thanks for reading us

      Love

      Passionspromise & poeticweaver

      • HisDirtyLiLPoet
        August 6, 2008
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        ... ugh! Don't blame me for that bad omen --

        LOL -- that's a trip if ya think about it!

        Anytime darlin'... anytime.

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