sundial mountains
stretch their giant shapes across
the lessening days
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Ah yes, this is lovely and evocative. Sundial is a unique descriptor of mountains, but very apt, I think. The last line is my favorite. Look at all the silibants you use, and with great effect!
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I'm not entirely sure it's unique, but apt. The reason I say I'm not sure of the uniqueness is that I often end up stumbling across an image I used in poetry I used to read years ago. lol
I forgot the titles, the authors, and the meat of those poems--but some of the images slipped in.
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The japanese form - the first form that i learned and always adore. Nice to see someone here use this form eloquently. Only a few here in my opinion can write this with the right amount of fluidity - you being one of them.
Soft and beautiful Sir.
Thanks for sharing
HENSLEY
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Ah Hensley. Yes the tanka and haiku are forms worth mastering. I firmly believe that to master just these two forms is to master a much of poetry in general. And to understand them even a little is to understand a great deal of poetry in general. They represent cornerstones over which higher stronger structures can be built.
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A terse offering compared to your normal pieces and with less scope for the gentle thought guidance that your works usually provide.
However, for me, the image is clear of a mountain as a gnomon casting a massive shadow hand as the sun sinks low.
Nice poem.
Jim
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Ah haikus are important bits of poetry I think. Without them English poetry would possibly never have made an evolutionary jump forward. To understand the haiku is to understand the point of poetry in general, I think.
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I cannot get the same feelings from these as I can your free verse or other structered works.It's not as if I don't like it, because I do, it just doesn't envoke the thinking process for me. It's almost like I need you to be as descriptive as possible..... but that is just me!!!!
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Hmm now I'm curious. Which of my poems that you've read would you say is your favorite? I'd like to compare that one with some of the recent posts and see if I can get an idea what the difference is. Of course, the difference could also be in me. I've been less disciplined the past couple years...
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beautiful
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Thankee
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