Strong, and large with thought.
I find you grazing your days away.
From this perch, I pant through heat -
- wave & dry hunger.
A rogue footed lion
lickin my chops
to your undesigned
fattening. Your brown
eyed mouth rolls, and
nose flares above
the sweet Prairie grass.
My darkened neck's mane,
thick for statement,
and wind tossed warning.
Beautifully unkept for this king's
feast, 'ntil we dance your death
tight in my mouth exhausting,
partners in more natural times.
Your breath jerks to recall an
end, in my embrace.
I bellow to you & your pride.
I roar for your warm blood.
Accepting our exchange until
you are inside of me
working out your soft flesh.
Covering your death face
with a free paw, I roll
up against you, marking
your outsides all mine.
In this loveless drought.
I find a fresh heart waiting.
To beat in me forever
This need to understand...
You're a missing link.
With your will kept
You will taste well needed,
and full of patient love.
A beast of burdened patience
Domesticated,
yet unhindered domestically.
Tame, though proudless & still.
My wild eyes hunt and find that
tether between men, & our wild stance,
It's you, as we both wait,
swishing our tails until night fall
let's me loose to descend, and I do.
Straight for you.
Even as I consumed you, your
eyes bid me, "Go ahead...
And take the time god
gave me, to be me, and
let you be so selflessly mine".
For the taking.
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Written January 12th, 2004
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quickening
you caught my eye by naming my sign, mr leo. What craze...perverse craze...and I saw you on Zaadz, and curiosity got the best of me. Seems I was rewarded with a premonition.
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Life, nor I, are PG
the pg tsunami ride
will be at disney land, next year. -
this seemed really intense... i liked the descriptions, and how this went along. even though it was kind of long, you kept me interested in it the whole way through. great job, and good luck in the contest
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Very Good!
Very, very interesting and creative. I like the description of Taurus and Leo(?) and how you view yourself as the animal itself. Excellent use of imagery and metaphors. A brilliant piece of work and its nice to read something that involves star-signs in some way or another. Thankyou very much for entering your poem into the contest and very well done! -
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Wow. Very very very well done. Good Luck in the contest! -
this was very interesting and I liked your metaphors.
Yvonne
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Lovely mounting of the stoic Taurus, who has a penchant for beauty and a need for all earthy....so it is said. And a nice portrait of the Leo kill in passion.. did he play with her before he took her down?
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This is more than a mouthful...... that I know. Hope you are well and having a great new year.
Take care friend,
Don -
Bullish
Upon reflection, darkly through a mirrored finish on the Roll's hood, I'd vote against adding the 'g' to "lickin" -- the slang derivative lends credence to the underbody of the poem -- a hard bodied urban aftertaste (not unlike Night Train). On the other hand, whatever the poet intended is obviously what it needs (and you never know what those drunken SOBs intended ... or if they intended anything at all).
Lovely lion/bull (ox/water buffalo/WTF) metaphor or is it simply a meta for the lion's kill? If she's a metaphor, then I'd guess its gotta be the white man's oppression of the brothers and keeping 'em down in the hood (or at the forefront of the army) whilst the corporations grow fat on their blood and flesh. Geez...pulled a whopper out of the hat didn't I? I got one of those Ronco Poetry Interpreters for Christmas and I'm not sure I've read the instructions correctly because a roasted chicken keeps falling out as the meaning for each and every textual context I fit into the rotisserie.
Whatever the meaning, I think we all agree we sense the power in the words, so it's a good thing (as Martha would say).
Frankly, If I'm ever killed by a lion (yah, it could happen), I hope my glazing eyes tell it to "eat my ass and I hope you choke you barstard!", but that's just me with a non-cooperative attitude.
Lovely write. Did you enjoy the zoo?
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Okay, I'm going to have to read this a number of times, such a raw and animalistic feel to it...very metaphorical, I think - but definately a play on star signs...to what end I am still in the process of discovering (feel free to fill me in on the behind the scenes -
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Couple of minor details -
"lickin my chops"
would add the "g" - the whole poem is so serious and well written that this looks like a typo to me...
and "And take the time (g)od - would consider capital "G" ...
The last part is a corker - the consuming eyes...sounds wonderful.
~Ody~ -
Taurus and Leo, hmmm? Both stubborn to a fault. Not sure if I get the gist of this though.
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