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daybreak’s stimulation



their bed
was a steaming cup
of black coffee
and cream. he drank
each drop
and let her simmer
a steady morning brew
awakening the day.
















Author notes

nothing like morning sex.
critques please!


peace to all ~flight

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  • written-in-ink
    September 4, 2008

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    very true
    there is nothing like it
    lol

    but thi was very nice
    and a nice way to write it down

    good job


  • Saffron gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    I adore the brevity in this, and your take on the prompt--nice work

    Thank you for entering the contest

    Saffron


    • flight
      August 24, 2008
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      thank you. do you have any critiques?
      peace to all ~flight


  • acoustical
    August 6, 2008
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    this is great!

    wowowowowow.
    you amaze me with your sensual works.
    seriously.
    yes.


  • Salt Walker
    August 6, 2008
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    well, i wouldnt know but, sounds steamy. nice job jo.
    Salt


  • KayJay
    August 6, 2008

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    Nope...nothing like it A wonderful image and well chosen words... a totally beautiful take on the prompt... Best of luck...
    Ken

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