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Waiting a Time ( Bronze )

Fast forward a tape cassette on life,

rewind time for only a moment.

Seasons turning ticked away,

Falling leaves tumble,

veins bleed crimson,

To the lines drawn upon my face.

each one tells a story.

Visions of hope,

painted the lanes I once did tread,

Overgrown hedgerows,

covered steps a footing,

tripping over,

grazed wounds hurt.

Hand held far reaching,

tentative a parent of a child weeping,

now became a parent themselves,

Love so special as were the smiles and tears of joy,

and two old people we are,

waiting...

 

 

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Oh God! you hold the play button of my life..Unknown

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  • Swtpoetryman
    August 10, 2008

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    A VERY BEAUTIFUL PIECE, INDEED - FROM A VERY BEAUTIFUL LADY!

    You did a wonderful job with this one, Julie. I'd like to borrow that tape recorder of yours for just for a day - or so - to rewind to the best moments of my life and perhaps on every Sunday evening so I could rewind back to Sunday morning so Monday and work at The Factory wouldn't come again - if you know what I mean! One of the moments I would rewind back to is the first time I saw your beautiful legs on one of me AP poetry pages and the first time you said HELLO! GOOD LUCK in this contest with this beautiful piece.
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 10, 2008

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    Ah..what a sketch you have painted to depiuct the truth of the life..just wonderful my friend...I love it..well done..


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you so much for hosting your contest and I loved penning my little piece for you.
      And, for the honor of Bronze
      Julie


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    August 6, 2008

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    wow what a take on this prompt.......... great job here.... thanks for sharing this and goood luck in your contest.....!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    Excellent take on the prompt!
    I certainly wish that I could turn back time and I know, in quite a few circumstances, I would have done things differently!
    Well Done & Good luck to you!


  • daviscth silver member
    August 6, 2008
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    This is a beautiful response to the prompt sissy. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Angelflower
    August 6, 2008

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    You did such a wonderful job!! I reallylove it! you expressed a lot here! what a very vivid take on a unique prompt best of luck!! I really enjoyed reading it!!


    Angel

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