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Like a Hairpin

Do you see her, do you see her
Hanging in, she’s hanging on
Well it is an instrument she uses
But she’s used it for too long

And oh, she’s quiet, oh so quiet
When you see her sitting there
But if you ask her, just don’t ask her
Cause I know you’re not prepared

For her answer, well it’s a counter
To the intentions you don’t imply
And there’s no reason, well its treason
But the action gets her by

Oh when she is calm, she is cool
So damned but resolute
And if you chide, you are a fool
To pull a trigger sure to shoot

She has the power though it’s hidden
And it’s backed with her intentions
I am sure that you are falling for her now
But unless she is the fallen
All is to be forgotten
Because no one is getting up unless she is down

Do you see her, do you see her
Sitting in her chair, she is playing with her hair
You want her for yourself but she’s her own
You can see her, but you can’t have her
As much as you persist, she is certain to resist
Because for her, it is more fun if you’re alone

Oh when she is calm, she is cool
So damned but resolute
And when I chide, I am a fool
To pull a trigger sure to shoot

But if she shot my way
I’d be dead to see the day
That her affliction turns affection
Please point in my direction
And fire away, oh fire away

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  • bleedingheart08
    November 6, 2008
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    nice


  • Terry Collett
    August 11, 2008
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    poem very good.

    The poem is very good; imagery excellent.


  • Angelflower
    August 11, 2008
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    Oh this was really neat.. It seemed like a song.Lol.I love the imagery and flow here though it was a little hard to read because the font blended a little too much with the background..But that could just be because I'm old..Lol. Anyway I really liked this. You did a great job with the imagery and emotion.. Thanks much for sharing...


    Angel


  • EbilyCuteKitte
    August 11, 2008
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    nice!

    i love dark poems and this is a good one


  • written-in-ink
    August 11, 2008

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    "oh when she is calm, she is cool
    so damned but resolute"

    loved it

    i think to me it means that even when she know shes wrong she makes it seem like shes right?

    did i totally miss the mark?

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