Her eyes lay in distant shadows,
hiding looming fears;
as flesh within moonlight
covets secrets,
held back
by frozen tears.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- 15/20 Semi - Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
450 points, ended August 11, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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great imagery
well deserving of the shiny
xoxoxo
passions
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This entire piece ties together so perfectly...
i love the phrase"frozen tears".
This is a term i shall use in the future
as i have searched for such a term...
Splendid...!
huggggss
becca
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Wow, this image is really something. The words you pen are powerful enough in themselves to stand alone. Really heavy line, flech within moonlight...love it
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Excellent, congratulations on your silver, though I thnk I would have given this gold. that's just me though.
Love,
jin
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very beautifel you were able to bring the pix to life with such truth... i can see what you see and the is what makes a good poet.. i liked it alot very good use of imagry andbeauty
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Excellent! congrats to you on the silver!love your imagery!
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spoken profoundly in such brevity with intense imagery - the emotions rain tears of sorrow clingng for hope. well done and many congrats on the shiny silver xx many blessings always xxx
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A beautifully dark penning... perfectly capturing the saddness and emotions of this... A wonderful take and a terrific entry...
Ken
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Wow~
Excellent my Friend and Love the rhyme
also the words woven-
...as flesh within moonlight...
covets secrets
Oh My!!
Grabs with intensity...Woot!!
Keep that quill dancing...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I saw this contest, and duh --- froze. My muse went blank. Yours, on the other hand, wrote a hair-raising poem in only 20 words, making me shiver. This image and your words made me turn to ice.
This is a dark take on this image and hopefully will place. Maybe if I do a little dance for you, it will win gold!
Best wishes,
Linda
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depicts a hard existence...
This makes me uncomfortable and I think that was exactly your intent. Nice work! ~Pamela 
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"as flesh within moonlight
covets secrets"...
This part
gave me goosebumps...
This is spooky and sad.
Frozen tears is also a very profound thought.
This is sensational.... Best of luck in the contest.
The perfect depth and meaning..
Oh and love the flow, most people dont flow well with such short pieces they often seem unfinished. So bravo here.
Loves you
Delila
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Beautiful take on this prompt ~ best of luck in the contest
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Captured emotions really well in your short piece....
All the very best!
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this is really great! you always pick such exotic pictures and you manage to captivate and describe every piece of it so vividly! i love your work and i love this piece. keep up the soul! all my love! :-*
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ohh this is very good hun!! keep on writing! Hugs and kisses!
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oh this good, i liked it.... good luck in the contest
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