Moving on is hard to do
when you been through pain i've been through
i ty to hide and not let my feelin show
but you are something i do not want to let go
bu i no for you it was for the best
but for me it onlly left me with pain and stress
your always runing through my mind
they say everything heals with in time
but for me the pain only grows
my depression is at its all time low
take a pill just to sleep
calm and peacefully
try to give up this lonely fight
see in the darkness a heavenly light
wake up to a new day
and hope that his memory has finally went away
Please tell me what you think
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... I'd suggest going over the spelling & grammar before you ask for reviews.
do what shadowlyn said & I think this poem will be a lot better. -
a good write, except for some small errors (mostly just typos i think). ln. 2: 'when you['ve] beeen through [the} pain i've been through'. ln. 3: "feeling[s]". ln. 5: "bu[t] i [know]". ln. 6: '[only]'. ln. 7: '[you're] always [running]'. ln. 16: 'and hope that his memory has finally [gone] away'. without those distracting those who read this though, it's a well conveyed message in its simplicity. hope that helps. may peace go with you
~shadowlyn
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