drums played new rhythm's pause,
she laid her head
on a full measure of rest;
his heart beat soundly
wing fluttered breath-
feathery dreams ringing;
he sang her
airborne
Author notes
Prompt: Melodies from Heaven (29 words)
A contest entry
- Quickie Word Prompt by Little Eagle.
300 points, ended August 6, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Review Desired.
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i've been reading a lot of music themed poems lately, but they are hardly ever original. this is original though. the opening imagery was perfect.
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oh, i love this! I needed to read something like this tonight. Thank you.
Love, Lane
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Excellent
Such a fantastic take on the prompt. Congratulations on the silver.
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OK.. this is just gorgeous! What a feeling of serenity it gives! Would love to find something like that in my life!
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Thank you for your entry
Hmm, I get the imagery of a woman and a man, perhaps two laying down together and she lays her head on his chest and he is singing to her. I like it. Romantic in a way but spiritual at the same time. Thank you for sharing.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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