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Night Rider

Missing image

 

Purity's  facade

abandoned,

wearing desire's

forbidden lace

on eve's train,

looking for someone

who has wardrobe

to fill passion's trunk.

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  • KayJay
    August 10, 2008

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    "Wearing desire's forbidden lace..." love this line... a well told tale and wonderful entry...
    Ken


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    Damn! That's excellent! I've been staring at the picture trying to think of something... you have nailed it here! Ahhh desire.. a fickle bed partner indeed!


  • thepoetssoul
    August 6, 2008

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    Wonderfully done on the picture prompt
    Exellent imagery and word usage.
    Splendidly done indeed.
    Best of wishes to you

    Tony

  • chiefmac
    August 6, 2008

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    How well the description fits the picture. Love-wearing desire's forbidden lace. So much with no wasted words. This will stand on its own with no picture. Great write.