Flowers invite a hopping dance,
tricky designed; tints of yellows
shadowed an aging sun, on his beloved child.
Swimming on breathing waves of asking futures,
an egg played in mighty hands.
Orchestra's of colours slowly ooze
through filtered moments of moving.
A coagulate kiss framed your mind's diary,
on a hot Summer-day....
Author notes
Picture Inspired: Visial Stimulator: "Summer" by cyzeal at deviantart.com
20-60 words.
A contest entry
- Summer Suspended by Gypsie Ink.
300 points, ended August 9, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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A coagulate kiss framed your mind's diary,
on a hot Summer-day....
I love that part...Wow!!!
such a lovely image to frame in the mind...
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Dude....excellent job on this.....metaphores are spot-on ~
Grammatical choices bring life to this write.....clever and wise ~
*Swimming on breathing waves of asking futures,*
*A coagulate kiss framed your mind's diary,
on a hot Summer-day....*.....gosh.....this is truly lovely Nev ~
The Gold looks great!
:)
God bless you!
Bear ~
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Hi ~Bear,
Always a pleasure to read your comments on my poems. Glad you stopped by. Yeah, the gold was really unexpected. Thank you for your thoughtfully and great comment
May God bless you always!
Nevel
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nice
original write . . liked "Flowers invite a hopping dance" and "through filtered moments of moving" . . congrats on the trophy
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Wow!
Fantastic! This is just amazing. Breathtaking. Again, Wow! My nine year old neice said she really liked this. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in my contest. -
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Excellent write !!!!!!!!!!!!!! Best of luck I love what you have done with this prompt ~
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thanks for encouragement, mi dear
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