Appreciate the gift that love implies
and sense the songs you choose to sing for me.
Do not neglect to find you in my eyes,
instead avail to soar about blue skies
relinquishing distrust to keep you free!
Appreciate the gift that love implies.
Our joint discoveries will bring surprise
apportioning to each what makes us "we."
Do not neglect to find you in my eyes.
In all you give, my soul moves and complies
returning offerings in like degree.
Appreciate the gift that love implies.
But, if you mask your heart, I too disguise
those parts of you reflecting strength in me.
Do not neglect to find you in my eyes.
Sing proudly to prevent our love's demise
as silent songs will never guarantee.
Appreciate the gift that love implies,
do not neglect to find you in my eyes.
Author notes
Prompt: If You Forget me by Pablo Neruda
(See Cupcrazy contest page for poem)
Pamela A. Lamppa
In a list
A contest entry
- Invite Only! For Those I Consider Some Of The Best Writers On The Site ! by Cupcrazy.
3500 points, ended September 18, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Beauty of a Villanelle by CitrineSunrise.
900 points, ended September 1, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I read this poem on Idle Mind Wondering, still want to come here and say again how well done this Villanelle is.
So much enjoyed reading it, thanks
Mari
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Thank you Mari.
Though written in light of Neruda, it had deeper roots for one who has responded so beautifully to it. I was thrilled to see the shiny cup on his piece.
~Pamela 
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This is one of my favorite forms right now. this one of yours is a wonderful example for me, the villanelle lines go so well throughout the poem. thanks for sharing, congratulations on the well deserved trophies
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Such a gorgeous Villanelle....Your form poetry is always so exquisite, sigh~
Lovely use of language, rhyme and flow...
This is beautiful from beginning to end
TY for entering this stunning piece...
Lynda
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A gorgeous Villanelle Pamela and a wonderful take on the Neruda Piece. This is such a graceful entry, lovely rhythm and flow, it just seeps into the heart. Thanks for the great entry Hugs, Bunny
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Wow , I have long since
been impressed by your ability to write in so many forms and you do them all so well. Certainly something that takes allot of time, effort and practice to do let alone be as accomplished as you have become. Hard work gives is rewards . Excellent write
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Roaddog Wolf
Thank you so much. You are kind with your comments and I am so pleased you enjoyed this poem. I love Villanelle but find it very difficult to write. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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It was so difficult to chose which of your wonderful poems to add to the finalist list. They are both outstanding in grace and lyricism. You have truly made this form your own as each poem is more powerful than the last. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Liz
Thank you so much. You picked my favorite of the two. I am thrilled for the honor of silver in your contest. Thank you so much. GREAT contest! I love Villanelle. ~Pamela
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Beatifully written. The villanelle sings.
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Bravo
Superb! This may be the best villanelle that I have ever found on AP, it is absolutely excellent in each and every regard! Loved it! bravo...
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Appreciate the gift that love implies,
ooh my such profound meaning, this Villanelle speaks and speaks. once again some wonderful work.
Blessings.
Frozentearz -
Singing proudly as ever with this beautiful villanelle - I love that wallpaper, too.
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It stands straight and tall, as a villanelle.
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very nice villanelle. This is worded excellently. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautiful villanelle, but that is no surprise coming from your talented pen. The words were strong throughout and the "rejection" stanza was my favorite. Villenelles have long been my favorite form to write and your example and critiques in Poets Survivor will help me to be a better poet. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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this is a very beautful poem. great write ^^
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The repetition in here works wonderfully and really captures the soul of this poem. I love a villanelle, this is a good write.
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yes, this villanelle sings an unforgettable song of caring, and deeper feelings; the rhyme is a fine part of the seamless flow here...so very well done in meter and form...PK
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"But, if you mask your heart, I too disguise
those parts of you reflecting strength in me"
This is such a great line.
Damned, if that ain't true.
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a good piece of poetry which flows along with a smooth rhythm and stylish rhyme, ah the form poem - i love them and hate them in equal measure, love because they show discipline and hate them 'cos we become too trapped in trying to be poets and not letting ourselves go.
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Wonderful!
This is quite beautiful and so audible.
I can see a choir singing this.
Congratulations, Poet.
You nailed it.
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This is a lovely piece of poetry you have pennedThey would make for some wonderful lyrics, I can hear old Willie singing now
Beautiful words and exellent formBest of wishes to you.
Tony
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This is gorgeous, moving and oh, so true.
Now, I'm moved to do another of these!
You truly do inspire in both voice and flow.
I absolutely fell for those two repeating lines.
Excellent expression of "completing". Blue
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