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Gluttony

Gluttony consumes this flesh
cast in sin -
I sigh.
Gluttony embraces this soul
moulded in depravity -
I die.

Temptation lingers.

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20 words

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  • KayJay
    August 10, 2008
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    A wonderful darkly tinged poem... powerful words and message... Well done and a great entry...
    Ken


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 8, 2008

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    Wow. this is one very powerful poem. Fantastic job with this prompt. I absolutely love it.

    "Temptation lingers" I love the last line, it sums it up at least for me it does.

    good luck

    kat


  • Darkwell
    August 7, 2008

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    Oooh i love this so powerful in such a short write. Awesome!

    Temptation Lingers

    Sweet finish


  • MysticalRayne
    August 6, 2008
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    Wonderfully penned ~ best of luck in the contest