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Excuse me ...

  

 

Excuse me sir.....

could you direct me please

to the aisle that offers immediate relief.

I am looking for the peace

"that passes all understanding."

For you see......

my heart has been heavy and sleep a brutal test.

Hope and faith have been replaced

by restlessness and worry.

Just point the way to the aisles

of hope, faith, love and trust.

"Right this way!" he urgently remarked.

Leading through the store past endless remedies.

Out into the parking lot he stopped next to a tree.

Rolled up his pants and got down on prayerful knee.

I must confess, surprisingly, that night I slept

as if I were a newborn baby wrapped in a single touch

shared love and mercy.

 

Prescribed to me

were two bold knees of humility

.....and the re-fills are free.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

 

 

 


 

 

Author notes

Contest prompt: written by unknown author the quote of :
"A single touch of true love is a prayer to God."

picture credit is the talented artistry of dreamstime.com, paid membership.


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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 3

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    This is uplifting. A very hopeful piece this is too as it touched me. The power of this piece is its simplicity. Well done Kath.

    Dark Wishes
    Wayne Leon


  • Daizee silver member
    June 24
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    Such an uplifting write that truly touches a reader's heart


  • AllexisReed
    June 24

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    I was looking for another poem and saw this one. This is absolutely the most beautiful poem. It touched me deeply.


  • everyone1 gold member
    May 6

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    Oh-Jesus ...!


    Oh-the-
    beauty-
    touching-
    the hand-
    ~ of God ~
    His-mercy-
    in-you ... perfected ...
    The-God-of-love, wondrous-
    and-unconditional-given-as-a-
    blessing-the perfection ... of-
    His love, another's heart ... ! I-tell-
    you I-am-taken-back-dear-heart ...
    In-the-well-of my soul,

    ~ my-heart-is-shaking, ~
    Peace to you, may-you
    ~~ be-for-another- ~~
    ~ the-aspiration ... ~



    ~ James ~


  • Gunther gold member
    May 2

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    It's easier than taking pills! This is a great poem that points out what is always there to bring immediate reliefe. Congradulations on yet another great write.---Mark


  • Balldinger silver member
    April 29

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    a touch of gold in the soul...

    one of my favorite lines in all of the "holy" scripture is a peace that passes all understanding. i'm nearly convinced that it can only rarely be experienced on this side of the chasm. love the way you wove this together as if in the local Rite Aid, looking for more pharmaceuticals. it's enough to make the drug companies proud - until the last line. much applause and centrifugal force...
    ~ EZB

  • Dobar Dan
    April 22

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    I deserves Gold - Very Nice Kathy

    Beautiful prayer answered - Bless God - Joe ----------------------------------------- peace on Earth -------- hugs


  • HeavensDaughter
    April 15
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    Wow! I can sure see why this is a gold! Awesome poem. Very touching and poignant!


  • callmeZakk
    April 9
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    wiw granny ur amazing
    how ru btw i havent talked to you in forever?


  • individuality gold member
    April 9

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    a good poem, ah a prayer here and thre can work wonders at times, a nice poem to accompany the photograph.

  • loafy
    December 9, 2008
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    Amazing! I like how you took love hope and faith literally...


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    How Did I Miss This Masterpiece!

    Beginning to end you caught my attention..It would catch anyone's attention, because it is not a sermon...it is life..and shows the power of prayer and human concern...A very real compassionate caring write, that is convincingly real...God does care and really answers prayer...Bookmarked dear friend ...What a write!


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 15, 2008

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    This is a very nice poem. I like it alot. It is easy to see how you won a gold trophy in this one. Great job.

    Mike


  • LadyShiva
    October 12, 2008

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    Wow this piece gives me chills. I love everything about, the way it's written and especially the message. Write on dear poet and congtrats on the trophy it is well deserved! Thank you for sharing.

    Lauren


  • georgie
    September 26, 2008
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    beautifully penned and a well deserved trophy winner,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    September 20, 2008
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    oh my goodness Kathleen this is brilliant!!! I'm so glad I found this write. No wander you won the Gold! you are such a master with these awesome writes of yours. I can only dream of writing like you do. I love how you led us to our knees !!!!

    love you girl
    Mary


  • written-in-ink
    September 7, 2008

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    wow

    very nice

    and i love your take on it i mean
    nice

    and apparently someone else loved it
    congras on the gold


  • Flowergirl
    August 29, 2008
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    very nice i liked it......keep it up..


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    August 21, 2008

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    Such perfect love you have captured. Beautiful write, congratulation on your gold win.

    ♥
    whisper


  • madamcb
    August 19, 2008

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    Lovely

    Congrats on the gold, this was truly lovely. I enjoyed reading it and am extremely inspired by it and through it, thanx for sharing, conni


  • stylization
    August 19, 2008
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    Wow. Thought-provoking, and the picture is lovely. Very much deserved the gold, congrats!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 10, 2008

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    Humm..this is the magic when you enjoy..and this is the truth when you ientify yourself in the essence of it..wonderful sharing..


  • songstress80
    August 10, 2008

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    touching

    i thought this one was very touching...it was wonderful to read another of your pieces again...i'll have to read more of your other ones later, i forgot how good you are...the music also has an interesting touch to it...great job and keep writing, my friend!

  • jadeangyal
    August 8, 2008

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    A simple and touching vignette. I guess prayer isn't something you can buy in a store. Well put. Just one thing: "My hope and faith has been replaced..." "has" should be "have" because "hope and faith" is a compound subject that takes a plural verb.


  • Nermin Nazim
    August 8, 2008

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    that is so smooth and true

    I love it and the simplicity and easiness in which the words are flowing. the feelings anyone can relate too. it is such a beautiful write, and I am praying to have this serenity for now and forever. thank you


  • faderman1959
    August 7, 2008
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    This is terrific! I just love the way the story unfolds and the ending is perfect!


  • moluv10
    August 7, 2008

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    This is a very bold, spiritual write here sis. I completely loved it! This is so true. You have done an excellent job with this. Best of luck in the contest.


  • humblpye gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    All you gotta do is ask...

    A lovely poetic way of saying it... "could you direct me please...!" I love this to pieces Kathleen, you're on the right track and you have a natural gift for sharing it so attractively with others! keep it up!
    John, hey! lookee here , i found another one

  • Dobar Dan
    August 6, 2008
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    Lovely

    you have done a great job of this one - the flow faultless and the story beautiful - good luck - that aisle is just a prayer away - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan) ------------------------------------------- hagd


  • Lucy.
    August 6, 2008

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    Beautiful take on the prompt! This is lovely...gorgeous ending. Well done.


  • Spiritual Nature
    August 6, 2008

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    This is excellent and I can, as I am sure many others will, truly relate to your words. In this day of hyper speed and the highly commercial society we live in...we need that peace that surpasses understanding. Thank you for sharing these.

    BLESSINGS, Doris


  • Shipwreck
    August 6, 2008

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    I thought this was fresh, original and fantastic. It was so emotional and my favourite lines have to be "Excuse me sir.....

    could you direct me please,

    to the aisle that offers immediate relief."

    Great

  • myagirl
    August 6, 2008
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    I loved this! It was brilliant!

  • poetryboy1985
    August 6, 2008
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    wow! very powerful


  • ShaShay
    August 6, 2008

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    I am in perfect agreement with the content. You presented it well and your flow was good. I enjoyed it very much. Pen on...~Poo~


  • NanohaSakura
    August 6, 2008
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    in trouble? Maybe?


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    WOW. This was remarkable. So powerful. My favorite lines would have to be

    "Excuse me sir.....
    could you direct me please,
    to the aisle that offers immediate relief."

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