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for you

i hurt you i know
i never ment to hurt you
i love you
i realy do
thats why i made this poem for you.

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  • aaaaaaaa
    September 8, 2008
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    I checked out your profile real quick and noticed you said you have trouble with the English language so I figured I'd help you out real quick.

    "ment" should be: "meant".

    "realy" should be: "really".

    "thats" should be: "that's".

    all the "i"'s should be "I".

    Besides that, it's good.. though I think the contest is calling for people who are under 13 years of age


  • Medina Regal
    September 8, 2008

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    hmm nice an short though the 2nd line i think should replace "hurt you" since its repeating the same thing
    though you dont have to replace both of em maybe replace 1 of those 2 words

    i just said this to polish an shine this poem i like it.

    betta hope ya win!
    cuz luck has nothing to do with it.


    though it says your age is 16 if you are im going to have to diqualify you.

    otherwise change your age if you arent.

    thanks an great poem either way


  • Redeemed15
    August 6, 2008

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    Jess, Short and Sweet does it! You've relayed exactly what you wanted to say in such a short meaningful poem. I've been trying to say this for a while! Great Job!