lovely bikini
admiring those saucy cheeks
as you scamper by
A contest entry
- Haiku's Here! by Age of Rain.
750 points, ended August 15, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
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LOL...
Yup....I can see this! Perfect Trad count & clever vivid write! Well done!
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This made me laugh.
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well done! showing perfect form
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lol...this is great, very well done in form and meaning in so few words...brevity often does rule...
nice work!
Blessings,
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This is too adorable.
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Quite a thought from the persona
Just scampering by and the persona's satisfied, hehe ~ -
nice thoughts here...
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the beach indeed! This saucy senryu is well done.
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Can't say I'm a fan...
...of the format Jim, but I certainly am of the sentiment this proffers.
Well done.
Robin.
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a haiku to carry us throughout the forthcoming winter...well done
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Punctuate
This saucey haiku - very nice indeed
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I am SO tempted to say "great poem that would be better with punctuation!" but I shall forebear.
I am not haiku expert but this does it for me!!!
great stuff
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Traditional senyru ...
aren't punctuated. True, I dislike it myself, but when someone specifically asks for a traditional senyru, I try to stick to traditional.
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