fireworks explode like the imagination,
With children watching with such adoration.
Characters sing and dance all night long,
the children fell like they belong.
The rides are both funny and a little scary,
some are just calming, like the AmaZing Ferry.
Some rides Roar and scream with horror,
these are for those dare-devil explorers.
The walks are long, but worth it,
but most of the time its a pain in the butt i admit.
But in the end, we all get to do something fun,
it feels like our day hasn't even begun.
The days are warm, but their hearts are hot,
all that can go wrong is a cannot.
You see it in their eyes,
When they have to say their goodbyes.
Author notes
this is simply a poem, no reflections on me,
trying out new stuff.
A contest entry
- Awwwwwwwwwwww by omg-its-sara.
600 points, ended October 8, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh thats cute! really nice poem!
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cute
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I like this piece a lot. Really liked the rhythm and rhyming in the first couple of stanzas. I personally didn't think the last two stanzas were quite as strong (in both meter, and in concept) but that's just my opinion, and I enjoyed the piece as a whole. This may not be the type of poem you usually write, but you definitely have an ability to pen this type of poem very well. Nice write!!
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yeah, i figured the last parts were weak...
thats good that I can atleast write this stuff LOL...
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