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Saturated nothings

The man in my dreams
what gives you right to haunt my dreams?


  All waters of the world run together
through the planet adjoining everything
  creates purposes and reasons
How do you experience my thoughts
  and respond to my dreams?

Oh Darling...
  rays of sunlight beam through the tinted glass
revealing what my heart says
  written in the sky among the clouds

sneeking into fairytales
  desires for nothings have faded
saturated in the untouched lust
    mother nature tries to fight it
fairytale crystal balls
  red silken dresses
let go of the demon
  his nasty deceptions
cause pain envy and ..........
  betrayal
 


  my tangled heart
tangled between dreams and reality
 

Oh well,

  Darling he has my heart

  I can't control what it feels
Breathe in my sayings
  let them carry you above the clouds


  the waters that I float upon
will rush into the stream
  that connects the river
to the lake
  someday I suppose
but not today.




Author notes

http://lovepoetry.adoringyou.com/11/22410331599123.html

http://www.netpoets.com/poems/love/1556001.htm

Sorry mr. judge I figured it out this time GRIN
thanks for being patient!

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  • Florida Sunshine
    August 19, 2008

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    I like the way you wrote this, it seems to carry me on a dream. ~ There are some many avenues to take the on~ ...


    Thank you so much for submitting this into the contest I do appreciate it. It was my pleasure to read and review your work.

    Best of luck to you,
    Florida Sunshine

  • hose30
    August 9, 2008

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    bravo. You really went deep with this one. You have to tell me wht you did so I can write a poem like this. This was really mindblowing. I enjoyed it. If I was giving a contest I would give it gold.Bravo


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    August 7, 2008

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    mommy!!!!! it's beautiful...the way you have the flow...the setup of the poem in general. It's gorgeous mommy ily!!!!