clothesline on Monday
host to flock of fat robins
laundry a lost cause
A contest entry
- laundry day by adsaige.
300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Judged
I don't claim to be the expert on haiku. In fact, I'm otherwise ignorant when it comes to the way it's suppose to be written. I feel it should only truly be attempted, when you understand exactly what is meant to make a haiku.
This is a contemporary style haiku. A 5/7/5 line scheme. Two observations. A motion in time.
It is nicely written. A soft moment.
Thank you for entering. Good Luck.
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Is this some type of haiku?
Anyway, it's simple, it has a lot of imagery in it. Impressive. Good luck in the 'laundry day' contest!
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a good poem penned, i always avoid that by never doing laundry lol i just let the rags fall off my stinking carcas
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