Is it just my deceitful heart that yearns for love
or have I found someone I've been dreaming of?
Tears well in my soul. I fear to feel hurt again
but your eyes reassure a hope I lost then.
I cry because I gave passion away on a whim
and what I wish I could give you I gave to him.
Yet your hands are gentle though you know of the past
you know all the tricks which the snakes have cast.
I feel good lying back in you arms to be held
and it feels as our hands perfectly meld.
Still I can not shake this doubt I'll wake from this dream
to return to a place where heart ache is a stream.
Please never change sweet charmer never let me go
It's been to long, my hearts' been stuck below.
Yet all of the doubt and hope I hold can not match this
when you looked in my eyes after a kiss.
Author notes
~Whitemaiden
It's been awhile since I've written anything. I don't know if this is what you're looking for but this is what came to me. 
A contest entry
- Second First Kiss (Note To Idiots: READ THE CONTEST CONTENT BEFORE ENTERING!) by Frodofan.
450 points, ended August 8, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice write
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Hoodwinked
This is a beautiful piece. And I can somewhat relate to some points of it. You have a great rhyme scheme, and I love the message of the piece. Great job dear poet. Keep it up.
always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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Hoodwinked
This is a lovely poem. It has been awhile since I found love and then it didn't work out when I did. I been loveless for almost two years. -
Hoodwinked
Wonderful job again. You've got such a nice way with words. You know exactly how to say things. Once again, I know what this feels like. Except the kiss part. I love it!
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Hood-Wink!
I meant my last comments to be Hood-Winks, but forgot to mark them accordingly! Sorry! But I did mean every word of those comments! This is a superb poem! It so shows new love and hope! You are a talented poet! -
Very good romantic poem!
Very good rhymed, romantic poem! This metaphor and images are absolutely superb! The rhythm is great and the wording is so good! Good rhyming lines, unforced and helping the the rhythm! I think you do and should have a winner here! Great work!
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Oh I really like this. There are few parts where I think the rhymes are weak and I'll point those out so you can look at them and think about them: Line 12, Line 14.
Great job. I'm envious.
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I really like this poem, I found that it flowed well and read easily. Such beautiul words, it really makes you feel. I particularly like the line:
'I cry because I gave passion away on a whim'
I think it says so much.
Great job, good luck in the contest!
SX
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