yes black coffee in bed
would please me
will even be careful
so i won't spill it all over the matress
which is stained anyway
by last night's wine, our sweat, our love fluids
and memories at large of a wonderful escapade
that we should and surely will forget
black morning coffee will
also soften the impact
of everything that was so nice
on my poor aching head
and get me sober and organized enough
to make it to the shower
before saying "thank you" and "goodbye"
A contest entry
- black coffee in bed by Saffron.
1000 points, ended August 24, 2008, 19 entries
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naughty naughty..they say to have another drink in the morning to sober oneself up..did the black coffee work..thats the way to do it mich love and leave them..xxx
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I think I am getting what you are saying here--hungover and needing coffee just to function...I always hesitate to leave any thing that even resembles a critical comment anymore, unless someone specifically asks for one, so I won't here except for one observation--it's probably just me, but "love fluids"--I would consider leaving that out or find another way to describe that sort of thing...
Thank you for entering the contest
Saffron
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Oh! This is sinfully delicious Michi! Personally though I detest black coffee...cream and sugar please! ***Pam***
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