bumble bee gives way
as bird soar through merryground
having heard sounds like
those playful children aloof
swaggering as dragonflys
Author notes
tanka
A contest entry
- Tanka Time by azure85.
600 points, ended August 7, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i love the poem
it helps you remember a great spring that you shared with your freinds going thru the meadows and plains
THANKS!
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I loved the happiness of this. well done!
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The last line is cool, and yoru tanka is full of a summer days with children and nature. Thank you so much.
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thank u
Thank u for the wonderful sentiments given to my tanka. I'm most appreciated with the applaudes given. Haley27
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I love those last two lines, and how you the poem is associated with all kinds of flight. Wonderfully done, best of luck in the contest!
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thank u
Thank u for the wonderful comments given to my tanka. Haven't done in a while. I'm glad u liked. I like the applaudes too. Haley27
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its very cute/
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thank u
thank u for such praises to my tanka. having done in a while. I'm glad u liked
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EXCELLENT/YET/YE OUGHT TO CHANGE SOMETHING AS BELOW I BET!
Having heard sounds like those of
Playful children aloof
Swaggering as dragonflys do
Which would circle lo!
BLESS,
PROF. MES
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thank you
thank u for the wonderful sentiments give to tanka, and I usee some of ur suggestions. hope u didn't mind. Haley27
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