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 Marcia

 

There is no time more beautiful in Mapleton than when the purple tibouchinas are in bloom in the village. One may feel spring coming even though it is still August. A whim, an impulsive pressure drove the assistant from the pharmacy to the shrubs beside the grand hotel. She had to see one, just one tibouchina, spilling its mauve to pink petals upon the kerbside. The plant was sheltered behind tall palings. You could always tell them by their masses of flowers; their lushness and almost fleshy texture ...and the bees. Today, the buds were there. Too much in the shade of towering Norfolk Island pines, the shrub was not yet in bloom. Behind the wall, the hotel car park ... nothing more. Marcia always had that burst of expectation; that impulse to catch a moment and the all too often instant of her disappointment when the expectation was unrealized. So it was with her Adam. He was in the bloom of manhood. Ready for most things. Pleasant. Feeling the youth of spring in the spring of his youth.  Marcia, however,  lapsed into the routine of killing the evening hours before a log fire and watching some travelogue DVD. Then, work the next day. Yet, one must own, her heart did flutter at very simple things; things we ought hold holy.  

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Prose poem.

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  • catz Moderators member
    September 20, 2008

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    This is such a beatifully written piece of poetic prose The story has a peaceful, alluring essence to it.

    Congratulations on the HM but it's worth much more

    Dee


    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Dear Dee

      If only you had been judge!
      Thank you!


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    Thank you for this beautiful story with images to fill my mind. I looked up Tibouchina on Google, I was intrigued to find out about this plant and beautiful it is too. The ending of your story was a little sad, but I guess you know that's what I like

    Congratulations on the HM, I wish it could have been more and thanks to Jade for running the contest to cheer me up.

    Love
    Sue


    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Sue, thank you.

      Tibouchinas should be planted in warm spots in London gardens. They are hardy.


  • R S Adams Jr silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    a flowing story/poem

    Your words flow like a brook with a beautiful image and a suspense as Marcia goes where the shrubs are. I waited to see what would happen.

    The ending seems sad...and I am left to wonder.

    • Lyndon gold member
      October 1, 2008
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      Thanks, mate.

      You must keep wondering.

    • Lyndon gold member
      August 10, 2008
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      You are supposed to be left

      wondering. I made it up yet I am still wondering!


  • paulcreates silver member
    August 9, 2008

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    A pleasure to be introduced to the flowers of your everyday existence Ron. The very characters possess the attributes of the flowers.
    ..and then there's this line, "...Feeling the youth of spring in the spring of his youth."
    I love that line.
    I myself have written a few prose pieces fron the experiences of my youth in Alaska if you'd like to see one or two.

    Paul

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