Timid girl
You are far too shy...
If not now
At what point in our lives?
Timid girl
You blend in the back
Hiding you
From a good life ahead...
Timid girl
You hold up a cloak
Gaurding you
From just those you love most!
Timid girl
What have you to fear
Open up
Let joy overtake fear
Timid girl
Let me hear your life
I will learn
Each event you describe
Timid girl
Let me in your life
Give a sign
That you are alright
Timid girl
What have you to fear?
Open up
And I'll lend you my ears.
Author notes
not my best...
but pretty good since it took me a grand total of 6 minutes to imagine, create, write and submit.
this poem came to mind when reading the prompt
"you are subtle
i wish i could
know you better."
A contest entry
- subtle by adsaige.
300 points, ended August 14, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does it make any sense?
Comments
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i really liked this, very relatable and true.
great job
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Judged
Hmm. A very interesting piece. It does speak to perhaps all the girls out there who hide behind the things they hide behind. All do whether they realize it or not.
Everyone does.
But I feel the repetition of Timid Girl did nothing to help the flow. It was rather tedious.
Thank you for entering. Good Luck!
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I know that it was tedious, and I could have made it less repetitive, but do u admit that its pretty good considering i did it in less then 10 minutes?
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Yes, it was good considering the time limit on it. But I think more effort could have been added.
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awe. babe i love it... but not as much as i love you :]] i don't love anything more than that.
Love u.
Katiee.
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