I’m occupied by tear-drained arguments,
Ink-bled bruises
smother
the true grain of my soul’s
tainted
quill,
Gambler’s dice lodged in my throat,
Blood soaked dollar bills,
flitting in my sight,
Paper-chain daisies dance beneath some embers,
until,
Terracotta brain-storms thrash
against such fallen wings, endless,
stand-still moments, forgotten like some
saving grace, emotionless like
me,
Streams of death’s eternal reign
burrow down inside some useless communion,
effervescent rivers, grim and sinister,
stalking like some hell-hound,
you see,
Distilled memories fade into self-sick
love letters, degraded and confined to
cobwebbed corners of despair;
Arrows of dead-end bows of steel,
breaking,
A plethora of failed romances,
Gripping china roses into dusty pieces,
tiny voices cry out in hollered desperation,
Some green-eyed passion breaks many,
aching,
Suffering innately, dream-built walls tumble
down, raining poppy seeds and misgivings,
some empty, frenzied overture,
falling upon so many deaf ears,
repenting,
Hour-glass grains of heaven’s sand,
tainted by such devilish necessity,
breathing in these white-shine spores,
punishing for innocence and left,
relenting,
Author notes
"and I don't hear my own soul scream" I chose option depression, hope you like 
and it's me X-Queen-Georgia-X
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A contest entry
- Prewrites welcome.... by Luckintheshadows.
500 points, ended September 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [Pure.Narcotic] by Xombii.
450 points, ended September 20, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Teen Angst by Perfect-Pain.
333 points, ended October 24, 2008, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for entering! you are a finalist.
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Oooh thankies
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This is very good.
I loved the slight rhyme at the end of each stanza, it not only gave the poem a unique form, but the rhyming wasn't too much to handle.
To pick out a favourite stanza is hell, but I honestly think my favourite would have to be
Gambler’s dice lodged in my throat,
Blood soaked dollar bills,
flitting in my sight,
Paper-chain daisies dance beneath some embers,
^.^
Thank you for entering!
♥
Lish
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Very impressive, especially enjoying the rhyme at the end of each stanza..very creative. Your imagery is marvelous...and I can't decide what I like the most, but a couple of things really stood out here for me:
"Gripping china roses into dusty pieces"
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"dream-built walls tumble
down, raining poppy seeds and misgivings,"
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"Hour-glass grains of heaven’s sand,
tainted by such devilish necessity,"
Absolutely superb write, thank you for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
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wow. i am impressed. i love your style! the last words at the end was great- they brought a 'close' to every stanza. this is amazingly awesome. i loved it from teh first word to the last. pure genius! great work
your muse is great!
-checkmate
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This is fucking excellent!
Sory for the profanity....meh, bollocks, you know I'm not really
Well written, excellent word choice, and a plethora of images to dazzle the minds eye.
Bravo
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wow this is so amazing love,
its got such great wording and structure,
all my love
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This was amazing!! just like you!! great work love...
Oz
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I am Loving your muse, because she is producing great poems . Beautiful write Georgia.
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Oh my gosh where did this poem come from this is great but explain to me what you were thinking when you wrote it woo hoo you writing again
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I honestly don't know where this came from it just began to flow Muse called, I amswered
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