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Conscious Streams

 

 

 

There’s days I feel I have no chance
to set my spirit free,
if you should give me but a glance,
I wonder what you’d see.

A mind that’s wise beyond my years
a heart that feels so much,
blue eyes that shed too many tears
and hands that need to touch.

A body that demands I rest
no spirit left to cry,
resolve that’s beaten to the test
and memories that sigh.

I’m many things to one and all
I wonder who I am,
to live behind a solid wall
and think my life’s a sham.

I have my needs, my thoughts and dreams
to live before I die,
to wallow in my conscious streams
no more to live a lie.

 

 

 


 

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  • moonbumps silver member
    August 8, 2008

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    This is one thing i would find difficult to get my head round but you acomplish this well-no surprise.
    Hilly xxx


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Well.. you could be writing about me here Sue! This is scary close to my own life!

    Amazing poem that reached out to me! You have many friends here who will offer that hand.


  • Maxboy gold member
    August 7, 2008

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    Best of luck in the contest.

    For those hands that need to touch, reach out,
    a friendly heart is near.


  • Musimwa
    August 7, 2008

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    Great...

    To dream is to live. Poets are but alive! Such is my opinion after reading this great piece u have penned. The poem has spoken all about the poet's self. I am pleased with the way u have used words to give us a clear picture of who u are. I love this. Keep this up Mum.

    Good day


    Son


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    This is a nice poem, but it is very sad. I hate to see someone as sensitive as you appear so lonely. I wish you the very best in the contest.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    Wonderful! Perfectly lovely and flowing to read. This is you? Hey! You could have written this about me!
    Pam


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    I forgot

    to wish you good luck in the contest.

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 6, 2008
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    Boffo!

    Sad, beautiful, well crafted.
    And memorable.

    Written in your garden this morning?


  • Legend silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    What a sad self portrait but a beautiful poem.
    Does anyone of us truly show our real self to the world? what may appear as a strong confident person to the world can be so far from the truth that it is unreal.
    All i can do is wish you far more happiness than you appear to be enjoying at the moment. I can though assure you that you do give happiness to your readers
    For that I thank you


  • ShaShay
    August 6, 2008
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    Well done. I will comment more at judging. ~Poo~


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    'I’m many things to one and all
    but I wonder who I am,
    to live behind a solid wall
    and think my life’s a sham.'

    This stanza hits a chord with me, we are so many different people to different people I think we lose our true self in the crowd as nobody knows that person. Thats when the forced smiles and airs of 'life is just fine' don't work.

    A great write Sis and a lovely ballad meter to boot. Ballads are fast becoming my fave even over the sonnet.

    I return to my hole in the shadows of existence

    Love ya

    Jem


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    I love ballad measure, beautifully done and hauntingly introspective.
    Find yourself soon my friend, you deserve to be happy and whole.

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