drawn to attention
like a moth to a burning flame
spinning an eternal web of lies
torturing your prey, one at a time
from the begining
there was something evil lurking in your eyes
a bitter cold heart pulsates beneath your bosom
shattering everyone hopes of happiness
decietful words escape your mouth
poisoning the thoughts of others
yet you manage to make those around you believe your genuine
never taking responsibility for your faults
always the martyr in this decietful world
and yet you ponder, why you live such a lonely existance
Author notes
as the saying goes misery loves company, i guess that why i keep this "friend" around. kind of a bitchy thing for me to do, but theres a long story that goes with it. too long to state in this box, but if you feel you really need to know, then message me
A contest entry
- Come on Lovely Poets! Let Your Hatred Come Out With Cruel Passion by Leaving Today.
465 points, ended August 19, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i have friends like this too. it always makes me feel better to be away from people like that but sometimes its unavoidable.
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thank you so much for the comment!
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A strong, powerful write that contains lots of emotions! I really liked it
Very flowing Great work! Keep it up!!
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very, VERY nice write...I loved the choice of words...it really helps portray the feelings.
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A very strong write. The reader can really feel your struggles with this so called friend, I really like the imagery that you have used for this. You have went beyond with these words. Also, thank you for commenting on one of my writes as well.♥
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I really enoyed this poem. It has so much hatred, and it certainly shows. Wow, such vehemence. Amazing.
Good luck in your contest!
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thank you thank you thank you for commenting. it really does mean the world to be when people comment and thank you for wishing me luck =)
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had too read it again!
i forgot to say as well, i love the last line.
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holy crap.
this is fraken awesome!
i am breath taken.
the way hatered just flows off the writing. it inflicted me with pity for this girl because (as you know) i know a bitch just like this.
i'm not sure if it was intended but the way this is written its almost like describing a snake, or more likely a spider.
here comes the broken record. . . AMAZING poem (once again)
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yeah in a way i guess you could say this chick i wrote about is like a black widow. you dont realize she can be deadly until she's bitten you. thanks for commenting and leaving such a nice comment for that matter
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That person reminds me of someone...
hrmmm...thats right my ex
Amazing metaphores you have here
All the best in the contest
Ken
ps Love the title aswell
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