Ravens rise
just to touch the sky,
And freedom runs
in the blood of each heart
forever feeling a rush
of wonder,
Celebrations cleanse
in an excitement of reason,
They weave where voices
recall honor
soaring beyond magic
held in times past,
Realms reached
by the blink of an eye,
And in the silence
a heart is born.
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stanza breaks?
great work. I really felt the force and power of the story you were telling. I wouldn't change anything really (besides perhaps some stanza breaks) this feels pretty well polished already.
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a good poem which skips the light fantastic and dives into smiles with ease. with every heart reborn or born there are brand new smiles and adventures that are set free into life's game, let the drums pick up the pace so we can dance along time's rhythm and cry as the war paint dries.
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Nice flow you have here Bill. Nicely done and set out.
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Lovely flow through this. Some good poetic devices and ideas here, good poem!
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This was really wonderful!! i really like the flow of it.. and the suitable rhyme as well was really good too.. The imagery was really detailed, which I really like.. Brings the poem to life.. Thank you very much for sharing!!I really enjoyed reading this..
Angel
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