Discount by antichrist at All poetry

Marinating in self-preservation
or was it
drowning in pity?

The value of my heart
depreciates
with idle stance.

Sober with reality
and beginning to feel
land-sick.

i choke on
an overdose of
equilibrium.

I am amongst the flightless
knowing that wings
are only meant to be clipped...

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hesh
May 8

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I really enjoyed this piece. Very well written with a powerful message that is both intelligent and thought provoking
thoughtfuldead
March 7

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I love it! Such little words that have a big message. I love that most about it. Great job! Your name fits perfectly with the message of the poem. lol =)
meganmeezy
February 12

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incredibly brilliant.
i love this. there's so much feeling in it, but it's so simple. it's amazing that you can convey so much with so little, long and over-worded poems tend to drain me, even though i write them sometimes. love it. :]
DumbBaby
December 22, 2008
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Really good. But you made me sad : (

but thats cool.
vampedvixen
December 5, 2008

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I love the part where you say that you're choking on an overdose of equilibrium. So often, people try to keep the status quo, that they forget about what they really want.. they start to want to not shake the boat and anything other than that really doesn't matter so much. It's really sad how many people get trapped in these kind of situations, so unable to clip their own wings and fall because they're afraid of the landing. You've done a great job displaying these kind of situations. I hope you continue to post your stuff here on this site because you have a voice that should not be ignored!
ItaloEtkin
December 3, 2008

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thats great...

wonderful title too..

really made me think and the imagery really got me, especially at the end

good job
Rootless
November 19, 2008

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haha, i cannot believe this poem, I find it funny that your name is Antichrist, as it pretty much describes that type of thinking conveyed within this poem. Good job from that point of view, and good job with a good write. Though, I pretty much believe opposite of you, it is still does a good job of its overall message.
OceanSleeper
November 17, 2008

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Loving it
Wow, so glad I came back to allpoetry! I absolutely love that last stanza, obviously i loved the rest of the poem too but that last sentiment really caught me by suprise, just totally grabbed me, thats going to be on my mind for quite a while. . . .
I really connected with the whole piece really, some really broding thoughts that are really tangible for me, you are clearly still very hooked up with your emotions and visualising your feelings. anyhow i better stop rambling . . . great write

take care xSleeperx
michaeline
November 9, 2008

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You have a good grasp on reality.In as much as it is true for many for others they feel that this is just not true.I feel the same as you do but I also know someone who does not share the same views.I like the title that you chose and the way you chose your words on this poem.Yu did a great job my hats off to such a good writer.
PrabhuDayal Khattar
October 26, 2008

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Ah..very touching end bringing the truth of this world..a great move of the poetic journey with a reality as its destination..well done...
Plastic Dreams
October 7, 2008

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This is amazing...

Each stanza completes the next but only by adding on to the context on feeling of which this conveys. the person below my comment officially sucks with that comment btw.

this has pulled a bit farther past imagery into a personal prayer of understanding. Feeling so grounded instead of moving, and wishing, and wondering, and escaping boundary.

Lovely.
Klayer
August 6, 2008
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wow. Nice imigery there, I like the word equilibrum. Sutch an intresting word to use.

XkX