Wearing black on black
Thrown around like trash
But tonight she’s decided
She won’t take him back
Looking in the mirror
Contacts to see clearer
The defeat in her eyes
Persuading her to crawl nearer
Bruises decorate her skin
My god, she’s so thin
And now she is determined
To not let him win
His affection is fake,
Always willing to take,
“I’ll never be enough.”
She says as she breaks.
****
Sinking to the floor
This time’s worse than before
Anxiously awaiting the moment
When he’ll walk through that door
His fists are prepared
It’s not like he’d care
He’s done so much damage,
She can’t be repaired
Cut open with fear
Choking back tears,
“You’ll never be enough.”
He says in her ear.
****
Hiding safe in her bed,
Fresh wounds bleeding red
“I’ll never be enough.”
I repeat in my head.
Author notes
Options: 1, 2 (love, depression), also
3- "The ones that you love the most are usually the ones that hurt you the most." Sorry for the many options, they all just seemed to fit my poem, haha
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WOW
The ending is chilling, very powerful
This is an amazing poem. Your emotions are raw and honest and pierce to the core
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WOW!!!
This is a very good write!!! I hope this write isnt about you... Its so emotional and depressing... Just what i like to read... But this is so deep.. Im really sorry if its true and i hope things get better!!!!No one deserves to be treated like this! Keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!
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This poem was just perfect. So much emotion. I loved the background. I loved the picture. I loved the poem. It was absolutly flawless. I absolutly loved when you went along the whole poem saying her and then changed it to first person. So that people finely realise that she's talking from personal experience!! Amazing and best of luck in my contest.
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goosebumps given
so earie and yet to a point so well written and overall a great poem
a sad story and yet so true
welcome to my finalist list
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*goosebumps* ooo this gave me chills.. it was so good and sad and beautiful .. i want to help this poor girl,, i felt the words and saw the picture it was very very good i mean wow...
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aww so sad
really well written verses
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This is so terribly sad. This makes me feel for you, for all of you...(not trying to steriotype). To have someone tell you you aren't good enough n u never will be. I have felt like that b4 but never in this sence. This makes me think of that song "with a broken wing" I loved the write with this, it really flowed! Bravo...and I am so sorry.
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This is so awful and sad and...EVIL of him! (whoever he is) Did this actually happen to you? IF so I hope you dumped the asshole! I for one want to kill him!!!!
Anyway, the poem was genius. I think it was great the way you changed from 3rd to 1st person at the end. That line, "I'll never be enough" makes me shudder (& want to cry)
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Youth
Amazing as it seems I read poems from many young women much like this. Why , I ask, do they allow brutes and knaves into their young lives. Do they not understand that they are setting the table for their future choices. To think it is love? Well I can tell you it is not. Free yourself enjoy your youth & let love come later when it can be real.
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Brialicious !! WHY DID YOU NOT TELL ME YOU HAD A NEW POEM UP? Gawd. You really need to like text me these things? Or something? That is why I have a phone now? My lord. I need to put you away.
Anyways. Onto your poem :]
This.was.beyond.fucking.AMAZING. I read your words, and seriously, I could relate so well. Favorite lines?
-Wearing black on black
Thrown around like trash <.<.idiot boys. thinking they can just throw us around. we'll show them =)
...But tonight she’s decided
She won’t take him back
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That last line, hoe. It struck me hard. I seriously had to take a deepdeep breath after reading that. Wowww.
-His affection is fake
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HUH. that one line right THERE reminds me of a certain BOY right now. Ugh. Fake affections. Fawking ayyy.
-Anxiously awaiting the moment
When he’ll walk through that door
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I honestly hate that feeling. Hah. You wrote it so perfectly right there. Couldn't have said it better myself. Amazingly powerfully stunningly darkly poem, my love. I'm always here for youuu. Remember thattt !
I love you bff♥
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BEAUTIFULLY TRAGIC!!!
the emotions n pain that come from this are so
strong that they almost sent me flying!!!
oh my god!!! i just love this piece so
much!! it was astounding!! simply amazing!
I LOVED IT!!!
i hope you havent had to go through
this, noone should. but if so, don't
feel alone, i have been there too!!!
YOU ARE ENOUGH!!
♥♥♥
manda
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-Dies.-
;lmflwkmfklewnfdnewkfnd ILOVEIT. BRIA.OH MY GAWD. I. LOVE. THIS. I felt that kind of pain that you descried. It's like I was there. My god, girl. You are amazing.
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oh i really liked this, its so sad and i know exactly where you're coming from.
"But tonight she’s decided
She won’t take him back
Looking in the mirror
Contacts to see clearer"
doesn't it always seem that you have to change yourself to make them happy? i really liked this part it hit me hard cos thats so me specially wif the contacts and everything.
"Sinking to the floor
This time’s worse than before
Anxiously awaiting the moment
When he’ll walk through that door"
liked this bit too, beway keep writing
xx he broke me
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wow
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