My skin shivers I'm not ready
and never will be
life just wastes, never waits
as I dance between the layers of air
foreign temperatures that pierce and devour
as new waves enter me, while I enter home
a word placed on the tip of my tongue
but never known
carry on, carry on
and away.
Drifting through makeshift memories
o'dear diary will we know truth
taking pills for the chemicals of depressants
but depressing is just blunt
because I do know how it rains
beneath rotting eyes
where is sleep, where is love
where is our hopes?
To the billionaires flashing money like cards
building falsified dreams in our hearts
just for another deposit
but how much can be withdrawn from nothing
leave in debt, for debt is defined
and classified with ID's
so persuasive to appearance
with penny whores under the worker's desk
to make a living in their life.
As the ambulance pushes the peddle
drive on, drive fast
for the arms of isolation grip her throat
she'll sooner be gone
but place the hope, rip the heart
just make sure to give sleeping pills
she wont want to wake upto see the truth
let her dream in death,for what I dreamt and wish
will he come too?
O' stars how I fell in love
twisted my hands in the prayers of no religion
but in ideas of the heart
the internal affair of walking barefoot
holding hands, kissing
in the wet mildew grass
so far from reach, I kissed the thought
goodbye.
So farewell to you, I know you
as you have known me
swapping hearts, reading minds
wishing on the same star, the same wish, together
forever, just the word we wanted
yet never to hear
I wait endlessly through time
to never move on, but to pass
withered flower on the grave of us
please love me still, as I still love you.
But it is midnight calling
as the cars drive by
in and out of my life, like everything
headlights flashing, cars beeping
get out of the road
this is no dream, not this time
but my ears plugged into tunes
trying to revive the soul
as metal meets my skin
I've never felt so close to feeling.
Author notes
gah.....
A contest entry
- Enter Your Best Poem Here, ONE WINNER TAKES ALL by echo-ink.
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Silver trophy winner
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This was flawless! I wont even say anythingjust wow............
next round off you go!
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wow hun. for once, actually do not know what to say here. there is so much power, so much emotion, and so much metaphor in this write that it just screams "read me" you did a great job with this hun, never stop writing and good luck in the contest.
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Ok, if you wrote that at the ass crack of morning, it's proff you're the best. thisd is beautiful penned
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Excellent
Wow, this looks like a winner to me. Such a fabulous creation. Best of luck in the contest.
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bravo !!!!! it works great as a poem, but i would love to hear this as lyrics
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WOw hun.. this is really good.. very emotional and yet dark as well.. I really loved the imagery here.. You did such a wonderful job expressing yourself.. Best of luck in the contest hun..
Angel
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This was soooo chalk full of emotion! You always write so ell sweetie and this is no exception. The intense emotion and imagery throughout this piece makes he reader feel and see wha you see well done, my stephiez!
Love you,
Dad
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this was deep i enjoyed reading this..the message was strong!..please check mine out and tell me what u think!
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Wow.. this is absolutely stunning hun! There is a lot of deep thought in there about life and love!
A brilliant write!
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Beautiful!
This poem touched me very deeply! There is so much to be seen in this poem, I could read it again and again. I love how you word everythin and all the images formed in my mind by your words. -
Oh! wow! How heartbreaking this is.
This was just awesome, what a powerful write, I adored this, Loved,Loved,loved it. thanks for entering and good luck. and a hug for your poor heart.
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wow
realy realy deep like it aloy -
Oh sissy this makes me feel as if someone has died and you can't get to them or tell them how you were feeling, as if they have gone forever and won't be back.
C
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this would be my adventure outside a few mins ago..lol *sigh*
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Oh hun, it sounds so painful for you
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hmm you've never been inside my head *shrugs*
it gets worse >.>
*hugs*
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