Fresh snow on the road,
once more I will walk the path
for the first time, yet again.
Maybe tomorrow
I will tread on today's path,
or place fresh footsteps in snow.
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Written January 12th, 2004
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wow.. this was very well written.. more meaning behind it than meets the eyes.. shall one walk the same old road.. or yet make another path through uncharted territory.. i thought it was a very well written piece.. good job. keep it up
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This is lovely, with nice allusion to Robert Frost, but completely origional. Short, and yet profound. Beautiful work.
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excellent
I found alot of meaning in so few words . I took it as either repeating our mistakes again (Maybe tomorrow I will tread on todays path ) ...or trying to change them (or place fresh footsteps in snow ) I am not sure if that is the right interpretation , but that is what I got out of it
<-----we always seem to stand at that croosroads eh? the one where we have to decide which path to take and hope that the one we choose is the right one ( right as in correct , not as in left or right ...this being a path I talk about )
Reenie
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Well..uhh..its intresting, I liked it, but don't understand it. Although I also don't understand all the different kinds of poetry. But I enjoyed contemplating it for a moment. Nice write.
-Hood
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I've decided I like sedoka. Does it have any other rules, as in haiku is usually about nature. I certainly like this poem
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good write bloodyangel
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Mary wishes she had some snow to put footprints in, loved the poem too.
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nice thought
what a lovely thought Andrew,
nice prose... I enjoyed the
back ground to! It's pretty
thank you for sharring.
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I have yet to do a Sedoka
When and if I do I hope its good as this one
Nicely done sweetie
Hope things are well with ya
Susan
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Excellent
A remarkable poem with a remarkable perspective and concept. Walking the old road but in a seemingly new path laid by fresh snow. Very profound my dear friend.....for WORLD PEACE & LOVE ~alam_shah~ -
I enjoy reading short poems, especially haikus or any other alike form.
I see on the second part doubts; keeping walking the same path, as you already know what you may find there, or to try something new.
Short, good, precisely!
Mari
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A great variation on the road less traveled. I like this we had a huge snow storm last week and it is always fun to be the first to venture out. I love this image. Great Write Susan
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nicely done
Yep, even the littlest decisions we make makes us stronger a stronger being... great write. take care -
Fasinating. I have never read this kind of poetry before. I would be interested in reading more of it if possible.
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Myron, your correct in that the sedoka is an old Japanese form. It is built from two poetic forms, ( Katauta ) with onji pattern of 5-7-7. It evolved from the mondo form and eventually evolved itself in the the waka or tanka form.
Andrew -
intruiging
interesting work & cancepts here...i don't know what a sedoka is...is it a form of japanese poetry? i see it's written as 5.7.7 in two verses. are there other rules about the sedoka as well? i'm intruiged....
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retread or new,,,,
the choices of our every day
Tamara -
Thankyou Kitesen,
That will teach me to pick a background when the system won't let me see what I'm doing.
Andrew -
Great these dragons but it is realy overkill comments and poetry are no longer readable. I wad lucky last night as I was not abled to receive the pictures and backgrounds.
Seems i am no longer registerd. But I hope they don't trow into the darkness -
I love this for what it is smart and fresh jsut domehting so naturfully simple and nice...starting over on something new. I just love how it's so easy to grasp...great story and even greater concept.
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hmph.........im a little neutral with this one. not quite sure why. but it was still nicely wrote reguardless.
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Hmmm maybe poetic ground hog day? As always wonderful poetry is born here on your page.
Aliana
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We just got another half a foot last night....I love the idea of the second stanza. Having the choice of yesterday's path or making a new one...This is a real philosophical write. it's really made me think...Another great one AndrewHide. Very well thought.....peace abel
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very good
You are in your usual good form with this one, Andrew. You always have such a natural way of phrasing things, and creating a thing of beauty. Thanks for posting.
best wishes,
Moses -
silent 'wondered
Clap,clap,clap hands together
restless wintersteps
kitesen ©2004 -
This is great and so timely to me.. We are just coming out from under a major snow storm, a unique experience here. Great write.
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outstanding.
WOW, this is really good. Living life in such a state that even the mundane is a new joy every day. Then having the ability to walk in yesterdays path. Enjoying the moments and memories, reliving. What a blessing that would be to a relationship.
Excellent.
John -
I enjoyed reading this poem... fresh snow never before having footprints Fresh snow on the road,
once more I will walk the path
for the first time, yet again. very good how you have turned your second stanza around Maybe tomorrow
I will tread on today's path,
or place fresh footsteps in snow. well done ~~wishintreeUK~~
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